Should've said no

Reyah was waiting paitently on the side walk. The sky was coated in gray, and it soon began to drizzle. Reyah only sat there on the side walk. Even when it began to downpour. She clutched her trembling, wet, arms with her hands. Reyah inhaled deeply.1

A figure was heading tward her. " Sorry I took so long, Reyah. " The guy apologized. Reyah only coughed in return. The guy took off his jacket and wrapped it around her. " Why did you take so long? " Reyah asked simply. But her voice trembled.2

" I was busy. " He told. " I thought...we were forever...you said you loved me. " She reminded him softly. " We are..... " He wisperd. " But you are always busy.... " Reyah choked. Her voice was cracking. Like a heart torn in two. 3

" You know I can't be with you every hour. " He stated. " We only see eachother an hour a day, Kevine! " Reyah cried. Salty tears mixed with the rain in her eyes. She stood up. Kevine gasped. " Where are you going??? " He shouted. Reyah was far away.4

Then, she tripped and fell on the road. Kevine rushed over. " It's your friggin' fault! What's your problem today, Reyah?! " Kevine yelled furiously. " It's YOU! You're my problem!!!!! " Reyah sobbed. Kevine was raged. He picked up Reyah by the collar.5

Her black hair was all over the place. " I'll make sure no guy will ever want you, leave me, and you'll never see the light of day. " Kevine said evily. Then he left. She was left there to cry. Cry a the tears of the world cried with her. She could never leave him.....6

Not for his threat, she loved him. But, Reyah knew he was cheating on her with many other girls. She cried until her eyes were swolen. Finnaly, Reyah stood up. She staggerd into the darkness. The darkness was soothing.... Tears began anew. " Why does love hurt?! " Reyah cried. She staggerd away, trembling.

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Hmmmm.....I seem to write about love more often.....

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  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    June 16, 2008
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    That bastard! How dare he treat her like that! I'm hoping to read more of this. Great job.


  • Yoko
    June 16, 2008

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    That it realy sad. The guy's a jerk. He cheats on her, yet she can't leave him. He is such a jerk, jerk, jerk! Here's a curse for him. May his bacon burn. Man, that was a nice story. Keep writing. Hehe, mew!


    • NinjaMegami
      June 16, 2008
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      Thanks!!!!!

      I wanted ti show how mean some people can be by taking advantage of a person's love. No one should be that cruel. But....there probably is some people like Kevine out there..........


  • Missi
    June 12, 2008

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    This is a great start and I'm sure you can continue it to make it wonderful!
    Like Tiger-Lily said it was a bit abrupt, you didnt give much background to the couple but it was a great start and I enjoyed it very much.

    Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Tiger-Lily
    June 11, 2008

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    Para 3 has a few typos.

    Hm...went a bit abrupt. The start was greatly paced, though.

    Poor girl. Love is lame. My view for now, I guess. xD

    -HT


    • NinjaMegami
      June 13, 2008
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      Sorry.....

      I know it was abrupt. I had lil' time to write it.....Thanks for the comment!

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