It Hurts.

Head to her pillow,
She lay there.
Still as a dove,
Unaware.1

Hoses driven up her nose,
Down her throat.
Her heart beat sinks,
Like a worn boat.2

It breathes for her,
She breathes for it.
It hums a purr,
She won`t quit.3

Wired to machines,
Feeding her poison.
One drug slowly kills her,
While the other prolongs death.4

Her family waits,
In a cold room.
Late night,
Turns to early morn.5

Second to Minute,
Minute to Hour.
The news does not come,
Finally, family succumb.6

One by one,
The visitors deplete.
They disappear,
He takes his seat.7

Holding her hand,
The clock strikes nine.
He cannot understand,
Why she dies.8

Hoses retract from her throat.
It no longer breathes,
And she no longer breathes.
Finally pain is lost.9

Grief,
Depression.
Belonging,
Moving on.

Author notes

Rest In Peace Grandpa...


I know, male female "mistake". I felt like the character should be female, more than male in this one, even though this factually happened to my grandfather.

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  • Tarja
    June 20, 2008
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    I in so very close to my grandparents so this was very emotional on a personal level for me. Although I was more looking for an actual story and I'd say this fits more under poetry... I did enjoy it very much so I thank you for entering. That last little stanza was painfully true. I liked it. Thanks again for the entry and good luck.


  • Embitter
    June 17, 2008

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    Ooh.. excellent freeverse imagery.
    The hoses... dear god. That's an image that will be stuck with me for quite some time.
    Good work and excellent piece.
    Keep writing


  • Zairre
    June 16, 2008
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    Very sad and emotional. It had a nice flow to it too. Well done.

  • detty
    June 16, 2008

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    Wow, the emotions are really raw and portrayed well. My condolences for your late grandfather... I agree that death isn't something we can easily understand, and I feel like I can relate to your poem somewhat, even though I wasn't allowed to be there when my grandma died. But your poem is good. (:

    Please read the rules though. Thanks for entering!


  • Bellerina
    June 13, 2008

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    Oh wow.

    I really liked reading it. It was really emotional but not over the top -which is a good thing- really well done.


  • Reaver Greeters member
    June 9, 2008

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    Very well written...emotional. I enjoyed reading it...which isn't something i can say about most poetry. You pulled it out here. Well done! Loved it!!


  • WhatALovelyDay silver member
    June 9, 2008
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    aww... that's sad. The flow was mostly good, but was kind of skewed in some places. It's still good, though. Something I don't get though... you write "her" throughout the poem, and then in the author's notes, you say "rest in peace grandpa"... and I've come to know that Grandpa's are usually male O.o
    lol. Good job, though.

    • kierancluchey
      June 9, 2008
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      I knew right away, some one would comment on that. It was easier to say her, and not he through out the poem, so a little gender change went on.. lol


  • Cecilia Marlana
    June 9, 2008
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    oh god

    This is so sad!!!! omg...so sad...I was nearly in tears!!! omg it was so sad! good job..good job...

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