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Oh, you angel, floating so high,2
Why do we have to say goodbye? 3
You are too pure to leave, to die, 4
No more do I want to cry. 5
Oh, you angel, drifting away,6
Why must we go our separate ways?7
I’ve done all I could, I tried, I prayed, 8
God never heard a thing I had to say. 9
Oh, you guardian, your dying inside, 10
And that you do not need to hide, 11
Don’t worry it wont scar your pride,12
If you need to, go on, just cry. 13
Oh, you guardian, your angel is fading,14
And to you this must be very paining, 15
The hope in your eyes is slowly draining, 16
This is too high a price to be paying. 17
Oh, you both, been through far too much,18
By now you would think your souls would be crushed, 19
You’re crying, and screaming; it’s all be hushed, 20
Those things called hearts have never been touched. 21
Dried tears, lost hope,22
No where to go, 23
I don’t know how you feel24
But I do know…25
When this angel falls, so sadly,26
The guardians going to fall too,27
So badly…28
Author notes
This is my first poem..ever. Please dont crush me!
What did you think????:D
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wow. that was good!
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Wow. I'm lost for words. This is too good
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Aww...that's so uberly sad. I gotta admit, for a first poem! It's pretty fantastic! I could kinda relate this to some people I know...but whatever lets not get into that...but hey you wrote it very well. Some parts seemed a little forced but they were really good! I really liked it. ^^
Aaez.
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As your first poem, I felt that this was very good. I like the emotion in this. It was quite sad, but that's what made it good. I enjoyed reading this. I think that you should continue to write more poems.
There were a few grammitcal errors, but that was the only issue I had with this. -
Great job.. wow.. This was.. incredible, and what makes it more incredible, it was your first poem. You did good on the rhyming.. very good. Excellent poem, i hope you keep writing.
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=( Great job, but it makes me sad..>.>
So much feeling in this poem. I loved it and it brings tears to my eyes, but don't worry thats a good thing...I think. >.> This is very good, no not just good. This is excellent! I loved it. Omg...I would get this published. *smiles* Its really good Cam. Great work! Look forward to seeing more from you! Keep up the good work! I give you 3 clappy things.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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