Lunar Moon (Alice's side of Twilight)

I closed my eyes and saw the strangest vision I've ever seen. A girl with mahogany hair, appearing to be in perfect health. She was being bit by Carlisle, no wait Edward? This all made no sense, who was the girl, why was she being bit if she was in perfect health, and why was Edward biting her? These were questions I knew would be answered in time.1

Edward? I thought. Jasper was my one true love, but he was worrying me since he has less control over the desire to drink blood. Knowing that Edward heard me, I thought,"Is he going to be okay?" Edward didn't do anything. "Is he in danger?" I thought. Edward nodded ever so slightly, that I was sure that nobody but me could see. A little bit of relief spread through me, but I still was worried about Jasper. What if he lost it and bit somebody.2

I focused my attention to something else. The new girl seemed to be so familiar, but I didn't know how. There was something about her. Knowing that Jasper already asked Edward if she was afraid of us, I decided not to think or say anything. Something about the way Edward stared at her puzzled me. He's never taken so long to read somebody's thoughts. Maybe he just wanted to know what the others thought of her. My attention turned to Rosalie, when she suggested that we leave.3

During my next two classes, I was trying to see something of Jasper's future. I could only see little bits of it like something was preventing me. I figured I could wait till the end of the day to ask Edward about him, once again.4

When Edward got to the car, I realized something was wrong with him because of the way he looked. While others asked him what was wrong, I went to my extraordinary power to see what his future was. I saw Edward, driving through snow far away. "Why are you leaving?" I asked him. Edward didn't say anything, he was probably reading my thoughts to see what my vision was. Suddenly, another vision came across me. It was Edward, and he was sucking the blood of the new girl at school (of course he was at her house, because he always thought through plans carefully.) "Oh!" I said, realizing that this girl's scent must appeal to him a ton. My visions flashed between him sucking her blood and him leaving. "Why don't you go ask Carlisle, and we can stay here and walk home?" I said. We all got out of the car as Edward drove away.5

I told the others of my visions, and suddenly it was all clear to them. I could tell by the look on their faces. "Maybe we all need a break to go and hunt this weekend, but probably not with Edward," I suggested and the others agreed.6

To be continued...

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  • Tiger-Lily
    June 7, 2008
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    "being bit" is an awkward phrase. Try "being bitten".

    Last line in para2needs a question mark.

    Hm...in a fanfic, you may want to try the same tone that Meyers uses, as that is what truly makes it fanfic.

    I recall the 1st chapter of Midnight Sun. Very interesting. I may despise the series but the 1st book is definitely worth it. xD

    -HT