Fall away from freedom and leave you.
Gently go, but know that I'm not leaving forever.
I could fall away into darkness and you wont see me!1
Voices in my head tell me to walk away, but I know that I'm stuck here behind these cold iron bars, there is no leaving once restricted to slavery. 2
I am here now and forever, to see the world from a different view than the rest. I will see the bridges and oceans with closed eyes, I will give you everything I have and take nothing, you can have my empire of dirt, just please let me break away.3
In the world you live in you merely see what lies ahead, but from behind the bars of mental restriction I see everything that can and will be. I see it perfectly. I see it as a Haven, but I can not have it... I will never have it and it will never be mine.4
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So threw these black bars of hatred I see you smiling down at me, but for what? You know I will not smile back up at you, yet still you smile, it perplexes me, but draws me to see you closer and I know... some day I will touch your face... and I will be free from these black iron bars.
Author notes
This one is semi personal, though really I did it for my friend Kait (FourFreedoms) who is very encouraging and whom I can talk to about abstract thinking since she is the most abstract person I know.lol. Anyway, thanks for reading, hope you guys like it!
The beginning was actually part of a song I wrote a while ago, but it fit in great, so here I am.
P.S
Animedestroyer... save it for a leprechaun whom cares!
P.P.S I did it off the 4th picture!
A contest entry
- Abstract Art - What Do You See? by Frozen Angel.
225 points, ended July 4, 2008, 6 entries
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This is a very emotional piece. It is reminiscent to something I would write, therefore I can identify with (If you look at my profile you will see what I am talking about). I like it. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I feel you here. It's comforting to know that such beauty can come from such darkness.


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wow...intense and deep, its like a poem
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haha, thanks, aye, not a fan of his.lol.
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Well writen and it involves a few issues that are fairly prominant.
Well writen!
Keep it up
Cheers
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Thanks for commenting! thanks alot.
Damian
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Wow, really sweet and touching! You're descriptions are full and wonderful!
My only problem was your first section where you started a lot of your sentences with the same word. I know it was for some effect but I just don't like it. Well, that was my opinion!
Great read!
Good luck in the contest!
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Aye, ye got to read the authors note for that one.lol. but thanks.
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