Little Susy

Little Susy was a quiet small child. Never really misbehaved.Always hidden away. Her parent were killed when she was 4 yrs. old. She is now 13. She smokes and cuts. Getting more depressed everyday. She has one good friend.The others are just there.She gets drunk on the weekends and party's all the time. Now her life just sucks ass. She doesn't know what to do anymore. She skips school and if she did go she just got in trouble. Her foster parents are getting sick of her attitude and behavior. They cry at night wondering what to do with her.She lives in a small town in Kansas.1

"Susy time to wake up."called Ellen her mom."You need to get ready."Susy stumbles out of bed."Hurry or you'll be late.""don't wanna be late now do we."Susy mumbled sarcastically.She got dressed in her usual punk outfit."I'm ready."Susy grabbed her bag and went out the door to the car.She arrives at school at 7:30."Mom its early,what am i supposed to do?""You could do your homework or read." "Bye mom."She walks slowly to the building.Her friend Kaylyn is waiting in the cafeteria at their usual table."Hey suz,Your up early." "ya, my mom woke me up earlier and told me i was gonna be late." They chatted till the bell rang."O boy time for classes." Susy remarked.She decides that English isn't too important and meets her gang at the ice cream shop."Hey Susy."said Joe."Hi Joe!" Nice to see around again." "Ya its nice to be back, that fight injured me too bad." "soooo Susy u want a smoke?""ummmmm i dint think so i am trying to cut that for now."she replied.Rick came wobbling over to where they all were."You guys want to go to Wiley's house tonight?" "There's gonna be an awesome party."2

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There is more...but i have to stop for now and pick up on it some other time.

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  • xSorrowsxHarmonyx
    February 14, 2005
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    So is this bassed on anyone??? cuz it sure does sound like it...well onto # two..hehehe...i like it so far!

  • this is pretty good so far, but it can have so much more added to it. It also needs to be broken into a reading form, like from a book, so it makes it easier for the reader to follow it. you have a great base, I would like to see what you really can do with this though!

  • mystic oceania
    January 27, 2005
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    nice right trish can't wait to see were your going with it just so you know i am going to break up with miguel
    ~mystic

  • Unholy Water
    January 26, 2005
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    I like it so far. Good descriptons, and in a way, it sounds like my life, and a friends. If I could make one suggestion though. I think that the piece would be tons easier to read if you didn't stick all the dialouge in one paragraph, but maybe that is just me. Can't wait to read more

    ~Unholy Water