the boy with moonlight hair

the boy with moonlight hair
is someone we all wish to know
his dagger eyes pierce the air
his milky white skin is aglow1

we gaze upon him from afar
he looks at each one of us in turn
we don’t know how lucky we are
to have our stare returned2

his lips part, the boy smiles
all of our hearts skip a beat
i speak for us all when i say we’d run miles
for a boy to love, that sweet3

he seems he might leap up and fly
unfurl hidden wings from somewhere
without a word, he’ll be lost in the sky-
the boy with moonlight hair

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  • wreckofthedayy
    September 8, 2008

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    wow wow wow! i LOVED that sarah! dont know what to say. that was so good.

    ♥MCB


  • Miss Belligerence
    June 23, 2008

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    I love the title and the imagery. It's a lovely description and a wonderful piece. great write!
    -gibson


  • karmaxandxcrayons
    June 14, 2008

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    Oh my gosh. Also beautiful. I love how this flows, and there are a few ways to interpret it. The words you chose just make the story that much better, and this is so amazingly awesome I just wanna hug the computer screen to death. I especially like how the first stanza is descriptive and I could really see the boy in my mind.

    Excellent job; never stop writing!!

    <3

    Maureen!!


  • Lover of Stories
    June 14, 2008

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    Nice piece, and I like your style of poetry. ^^ Your entry seems like it fits well with the photograph. Keep writing!

  • sunshinexreggae
    June 14, 2008

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    Makes me daydream.. ^^

    It's truly beautiful <3
    I really like it . You have found such a sophisticated way of expressing my opinion when I saw his picture, which was something along the lines of "OMG! Sexy beast!" lol
    As to your writing, it's very delicate.. I really like that. Your words feel like the aura my diary has. Which is calm, light and peaceful.
    I like the part where she speaks for them all, you can just imagine all these girls admiring him, with their dreamy eyes and melting hearts.
    I love the ending as well... I'm a big fan of wings and male angels so that really pleased me ^^
    Moonlight was a great choice too.. actually all your words were really well chosen! <3 I've read this a couple of times now and I like it more and more everytime...
    Good luck in the contest <3
    xoxo


    • miles of smiles
      June 14, 2008
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      thanks so much! i just thought it was an accomplishment that i made it all rhyme

  • karmaxandxcrayons
    June 5, 2008
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    NICE JOB!! This story was deep and it moved me inside...

    XP Keep writing!!!

    <3

    Maureen.

    (by the way i can't wait until you actually write this because i love reading your stuff!!!)

  • sunshinexreggae
    June 4, 2008
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    ^^ hellooo

    Hello ^^
    Thank you very much for entering my contest ^^
    Here's your picture:
    http://blog.tenbit.pl/i/blog/upload/notes/l/love_xD/527.jpg

    If the URL doesn't work, let me know and I'll try to do something about it ^^
    Most of all have fun and enjoy writing your story ^^ don't be afraid to be creative + original and use your imagination to the fullest <3
    Good luck, and once again thanks! ^^
    <3
    xoxo

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