Believe in Someone Other then Me.

I hate when I can’t talk to you,
when you’ve left to do something else,
I’m just sitting there wondering when you’ll be back
wondering how long it will take.
Because I need you,
my heart pounds when you’re not around,
I want to believe that you need me just as much.
I need to believe that someone wants me to breathe,
and I know that without you here I would be nothing,
I was nothing until I met you.
I was fading and falling and you caught me,
now I bleed and hurt when I’m not with you.
So I wait for you to follow suit and to send me another love note so I can believe in someone other then me.1

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KK, this is still personal, but also my first love story/poem, I've never written anything about love, but I am so glad I wrote this one, and I know that theres one person on here that knows who this is for.

Damian

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  • SquirrelRaiders
    June 17, 2008

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    EXCELLENT!

    Damian, for your first venture into writing about love, it is wonderful, beautiful, outstanding, touching, heart-felt. You have an amazing gift. Keep it up. As long as you write what is in your heart, you'll keep that fire alive in your writing. WOW. WOW.


    • Swords of Ireland
      June 18, 2008
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      Thanks... it made it sort of easy since it was about someone.

      Thanks for reading.

      Damian


  • zoralielda
    June 6, 2008
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    oooh, love poems!


  • Bells Kelly
    June 5, 2008

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    Beautiful...absolutly beautiful.
    Love is an interisting thing.
    keep it up man.
    P.S. I know who it's for! at least I think i do
    Cheers

  • Elegant Inspirer
    June 2, 2008

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    Its Beautiful.

    Writing about love is hard and yet easy at the same time its such a raw emotion. The words flow so easily but the hard part is perfecting the words to adequately express its deepths. I really really liked this one. My heart beats faster as I read it. All I can say is its beautiful.

    Elli

  • Lodkod
    June 2, 2008
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    I don't know who this is for lol (JK) it was sweet


  • Asonine
    June 2, 2008
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    Aw, I really like this one, very emotional! It's so sweet! a deffinet applaus!


    • Swords of Ireland
      June 2, 2008
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      Thanks, actually I think he do know who this is for.lol. alrighty, two people know.lol.

      Damian


  • Solidarity silver member
    June 2, 2008
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    Lovely and emotive.

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