Face this World Alone.

Feeling empty, knowing you won’t let me live.1

I am breaking, falling face down in the dirt.2

And you don’t know me, or how I will be, 3

Don’t you follow me.4

I can’t leave, if you’re dragging at my feet.5

I can’t go, if everything is falling apart, 6

I can’t remember anything better then this.7

Don’t tell me I’m not good enough.8

Don’t tell me this is the end of me.9

I will not fall away and be slain.10

I walk with horrifying steps, waiting to fall again,11

Waiting for you to pull me down,12

My tears are fading,13

There are no memories in my eyes.14

My face is hollow, my heart is bleeding,15

Give me one more chance16

And I will show you… that I can face this world alone.17

I will show you…18

That I can face this world alone.19

Author notes

I wrote this when I was sixteen after my Father went to Prison, to get over everything I decided to put it on here, hope I wrote it well.

Damian.

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  • SquirrelRaiders
    June 20, 2008

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    LOVE IT!

    Damian, I can't tell you how much I love this poem! It is beautifully crafted--each word is PERFECT. I especially loved line 11 through the end of the poem. Line 14 is GENIUS. This piece really hits home. It leaves the readers hoping and wanting and wishing for your every success in life because you have allowed all of us to reach your inner feelings here. Thank you.


  • zoralielda
    June 6, 2008
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    Weldone, you have so much talent!


    • Swords of Ireland
      June 6, 2008
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      Thank You, this one just sort of came to me as I wrote, so I really didn't know how it was going to turn out.


  • Bells Kelly
    June 5, 2008
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    Well done Damian.
    You have excellent talent (just thought I'd say that again)
    Keep it up.
    Cheers

  • Lodkod
    June 2, 2008
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    Thats so well put together, WOW!


  • Asonine
    June 2, 2008

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    Om, this is really good, nothing horrible has really ever happend to me, but I really do know where you're coming from, I'm sorry that this was writtable when you were so young.

    Freeedom.

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