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"Once you find out about the experiment, you become part of the experiment." Jasper snarled at me, but behind his words I heard a flicker of pain, it was as if he was acting. I knew it was a bad idea to listen to my new so called friends they all told me to befriend him, what did I get myself into.
Jay looked coolly at me from his seat, smug.
“Don't think of it as me being evil,” He grinned, showing his perfectly sculpted teeth. “Think of me us an unused opportunity,” I glared at him unable to speak from the gag that was in my mouth. I tried to yell at him but all that came out was a mumbled grunt. He motioned for Jasper to take the gag out of my mouth, how stupid I had been to think that he liked me. He looked down at me sadly as he removed the gag, his hands soft against my tear stained face.
“You swine, pig faced, you poor excuse for a person, what the hell do you want with me,” I spat as Jasper removed the gag. “Jay looked at me smiling, you know what I want,” He replied looking across at me as if I had attacked his cat. He looked at me standing up, his blue eyes sparkling even in the small light that illuminated the room. Taking a step toward me he pulled out a small blade. I realized what he was trying to do. “Try it,” I spat at him. New tears falling down my face. He walked over to me as you would think a toddler would walk to a present. Jaspers fist tightened as Jay walked closer to me. Leering Jay stood over me contemplating what to do. “Don't try anything jerk face,” I spat. Jay laid a hand on the right side of my face and let it trail down, leaving me disgusted at his touch, he grinned when displeasure spread over my face. “Jay, you remember what we have to do,” Jasper whispered. Jay seemed to snap back into reality as Jasper spoke. “Yes,” Jay replied disappointed, he turned quickly, scratching me with his blade, I grimaced in pain, all the hits seemed to be worse when inflicted by these people, deeper, if you know what I mean. Jay walked away from me. “Keep her under control.”He instructed Jasper. He nodded in a reply. Jasper turned and looked at me, tears brimming his eyes. “I'm sorry Annabella,” he whispered at me, truth was thick in his words. He ran over and hugged me as the big door slammed shut. Whispering every apology he could think of at me. He hurried to untie me. “What are you doing?” I asked dazed.
“Getting you out of the mess I got you into,” He replied, pulling me into a hug when he finished untying me. “But you have to go, Jay will be back soon, he just went to get the bidders,” I looked at him in shock. “How long have you know?” I whispered meekly. “As soon as you arrived, I knew,” He released me from my hug, and tugged on my hand, urging me to hurry. I followed him, not sure if I should. I did beside my better judgment, in moments we were out in the open. “Go,” He urged, my heart felt torn, I wanted Jasper I knew he was good, I felt it. “Go,” He urged even more, almost screaming. “Only if you come to,” I said to him, he looked at me as if I was crazy, I sure felt it at that moment. “You once said to me that our lives truly begin when they end, lets test that theory,” I said grabbing him and pulling him over my back, he wrapped his arms around me.”Lets.” He replied smiling at me. I started to run, faster and faster in moments the building that I had been held captive in was gone. “Together.” I replied, smiling.

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I used a lot of the options for this competition, as you can see, the names, the quote kinda and the lines.

I don't know if this will become a bigger story guys, kind of not thinking about it yet

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  • Toxic Valentine
    February 3

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    You kept my attention the whole time. I loved it! I'll give you clappies tomorrow. Unfortunately I have run out...Dang!


  • WhatALovelyDay
    June 2, 2008

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    woo hoo! This sounds exciting so far It would be nice if you continued it, to find out what kind of experiment they're talking about I like how you used my names, thank you ^-^
    This needs to be proofread, or edited, 'cause I saw alot of grammar-ish errors, but as far as I saw, your sentence structure is fine I think I saw a few places where you needed a comma, though. But it's still great
    This is gonna be a finalist, because I'm pleased with the way you used my options
    ♥ Lawliet ♥


    • Vampiric souls
      June 2, 2008
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      thank you, I'll get one of my friends to read over it for me cause i can't pick up on my mistakes, thank you for making me a finalist