Nighttime Horror: Demon Child

Gaining the strength I knew that I had to make this journey out alive and to save this little girl, walking more into the forest I spot a cave, I decided that we need to rest and that place should be safe, approaching the cave I shine my flashlight just to make sure if there wasn't anything in there after checking things out I knew that we would be safe, I got Gabby off my back and laid her on the ground "are you hunger", she nodded yes so I grab out some sandwiches for her to eat, While eating our food Gabby looked at me all serious, "Lady can I tell you a secret?" yes I told her, Gabby stood up, " I know how daddy died, and I know that mommy is dead to", I looked at her with fear, "How do you know this?" I asked her, " Well you see I did it, they were mean parents my daddy hurt me all the time and mommy helped him so they had to die," "and I was the one who brought you here," with fright I stand up and try to speak, "Umm what do you mean you killed them and how did you know to bring me here, why am I involved in this?", "Well you see, I heard daddy telling mommy one day that he had another daughter, and I found the picture of you," "Gabby" I yelled, "This isn't true you are only four you do not know what you are talking about, Please stop this you are scarring me." " I have proof" Gabby said evilly, heading towards her backpack she looks at stares a hole right in me, "Look" sure enough in her hand was a picture of me when I was three with my mother and this other man, "How can this be", I was told he was dead" Gabby starts to laugh "Well he is now and you are next,"  " Gabby please I didn't know, you cannot do this" all of a sudden Gabby's eyes turn red and her voiced deepen, "You cannot escape from me"  With my adrenaline pumping I get up and push the little demon girl out of my way and start to run out of the cave, With a evil chuckle in her voice she says " You can run but you can't hide".1

Running through the dark forest I cannot believe what is going on, why did my mom lie to me and why am I being punish? Also I cannot believe that I am scared of a little girl if that is what you want to call her. Stopping to take a breathe, in the distance I heard a noise not trying to make a sound I hide behind some bushes, I see a shadow of someone as the figure gets closer I see that is it Gabby, but she was with someone, or something, the moonlight barely hits the other shadow and I try to make out who it could be, straining my eyes I finally made out what this creature was, walking with this little girl was a beast long fingers and green in color, long snout and what I could make out it also has a very long tail, I cannot believe this, how I am I going to make it out alive, Shaking in fright I keep my eyes on the two. Trying hard not to make a noise I slowly creep behind the other bushes I didn't want to lose sight of them. I need to find out exactly what I was up against. Following them slowly I noticed that they were joined with more creatures of the night, And to my surprise I saw that mysterious bight light, and it finally dawned on me that it was some kind of tracking device.2

Standing so still in the bushes I overheard one of the creatures saying "She isn't far I can smell her fear" backing up slowly I trip over a branch with that sudden noise the creatures spotted me, knowing I am in trouble I get up fast and start to run. All of a sudden my legs feel weak and I become glue to the soil turning my head to look there was a creature behind me using some power to capture me with all my might I try to fight and get lose nothing is working. The creature appear fast and grab me. Screaming and kicking and pleading for them to let me go. My eyes become covered with some black cloth and my mouth taped shut, not knowing what is going to happen I faint in fright.3

Coming to I find myself tied onto a stone bed and I see creatures all around me, and I hear them chanting something I cannot make out what they are saying, Then Gabby appears in front of me holding a dagger over my heart with tears flowing down my face I try to scream but they are being muffled by the gag in my mouth, Gabby started to chat over me4

"Demon of night I beckon thee take her blood and let my power feed" "For this innocent blood shall set me free". Closing my eyes I feel the piercing of the knife entering my chest and the flow of my blood dripping down my arm. The creatures hover over me feeding off my blood, Slowly I drift away hearing the evil laughter and my silent cries.5

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  • Sweet Briar
    February 14, 2005
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    Thank you lol and here is a night light for ya lol

  • Midnight Lace
    February 14, 2005
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    OMG I don't think I will ever be able to sleep again. You really can capture horror. Damn girl...your good. This was good.

  • Sweet Briar
    January 29, 2005
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    Thank you for pointing out my mistakes. I wrote my two stories while I heavily medicated up. lol.. So I know I probally have lots of mistakes that I need to redo. But I have to say being on pain pills brought out the very creepy side of me lol


  • Night Terrors
    January 29, 2005
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    That is cool but Can I say that you need to go back over this it has quite a few grammar mistakes take thi sfor example:

    Umm what do you mean you killed then and how did you know to bring me here, why am I involved in this?",

    Then should be them

    fix those few mistakes and you you got yourself one hell of a mind tingling story oh and just so you know when your using dialoge you start a new paragraph every time you have a new speaker. Rock on my Friend you are an excellent writer!

  • LadyAmalthea
    January 28, 2005
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    Gruesome

    That was so good and descriptive, it was like a movie in my head (believe me it doesn't happen to often) It was horrifying, at the begginging i Was like, this is no horror and at the end, my hands where shaking on my keybored, EXcellEnT job Jenn!

  • SexyAngel0418
    January 25, 2005
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    Hey Jenn!!! Awesome second part... It's like I'm watching a movie or something b/c of the details... Please write more stories... and maybe some love stories or something... LOL...


  • Nicolisis
    January 25, 2005
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    WOW Jenn! I'm scared!!! Kill it! Kill her!! She's evil!! Hide Bloody hell this was scary, my heart is racing now as I read it. she's a bad! Bad! Girl

    Excellent job Jenn! I loved it!

    luv Niky xxxx

  • Sweet Briar
    January 25, 2005
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    Wow!! Thank you... I guess I just had some hidden talent or was always scared on trying to write stories..

  • Touchof1der
    January 25, 2005
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    Sweetie... I have taken so many writing workshops, with stories being my main point of interest and I have attended classes with those who were considered "seasoned" writer's that didn't hold my attention or the appeal that you do here!

  • Sweet Briar
    January 25, 2005
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    Kimberly really!!! OMG those words I will ever hold to my heart.. I thought I would try something different and I was thinking that these would not turn out great but by your comments on both of them makes me want to write more stories.. Thank you so much for giving me the courage to write more!!

    ♥ Jenn

  • Touchof1der
    January 25, 2005
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    You really don't want me catching any shut eye tonight do you. You are so talented Jenn! This is amazing. I have never read stpries by you before. I've enjoyed several of your poems but girl... this is stunning work!
    ♥ Kimberly

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