Stars. I like stars. Love, adore, want to eat etc. I don’t mean the Johnny Depp kind of stars. I mean the ones shining bright at night, glancing at our little planet. We must look like filthy, little particles of dust to them. Foolish, stupid, filthy, little particles of dust, too blind to face their problems and take responsibility for our actions.
Messing up our own planet and blaming others for it. They must be laughing at our ignorance and arrogance. Maybe one leads to the other, I don’t know. But one way or the other they’re connected with each other. Arrogant people are ignorant. People who deny they’re ignorant are arrogant. We’re all ignorant, in our own ways. I’m ignorant. Me in particularly. Don’t even know how to write particularly, need the auto correction.* Another thing. When did we start to trust technology so damn much? When did we decide that machines, consisting of chips and memory cards, their thinking consisting of nothing but ones and zeroes, are more clever or interesting than human beings? When did we trade rainy days, sitting in front of the chimney playing scrabble in for killing pixels with your Play Station 3? 1
The closest star to planet Earth, ma’am Sun. What would she be thinking of us? We must look like completely retarded morons. We traded in her loving, warm sunbeams which would caress our skin. It would make us feel beautiful and beloved. When the clouds would fade away and the sun would show its face again, the world would smile. We traded in summer days at the beach, little kids playing in the sand. Little boys building castles, little girls searching for shells near the surf, their little feet being washed by the water every time a wave would hit the beach. We traded it all in for solariums, which UV-radiation will give us cancer and kill us all. God, we’re so naive.2
Why are the stars (and Al Gore, but he isn’t taking responsibility at all. He’s putting the blame on someone else and meanwhile he use 6 zillion times as much energy as we do) the only one to see we’re screwing up our planet, with satisfied smiles on our face? What kind of world will we leave behind us once or days have passed. Or, you can ask yourself the question, what world AREN’T we leaving behind us when we’ll be dead and gone. Is there nothing left to safe here? Does truly everyone think banning the problem to tomorrow and live today as if there would never be a tomorrow solves the problem?3
The stars, who once glanced proud at our little planet, how the Egyptians built pyramids, Caesar conquering Europe. When we crossed with our ships the Atlantic for the first time. When Leonardi da Vinci painted the Mona Lisa, when Galileo started to study our universe. Later on, when France became a republic for the first time in history. They now look disgusted as us, wondering how the desire of money, power and even more of those two could have made us so blind that we weren’t even able to see what we were doing to our planet and their inhabitants.4
Stars. I like stars. The ones that are shining bright at night, glancing at our little planet. The foolish, stupid, filthy, little particles of dust. Sill too blind to face our problems and take responsibility for our action and I guess we’ll never learn.5
*hehe, but English ain’t my native tongue or first language, so I guess you can’t take my spelling too serious?
Author notes
Uhmm, I started, planning on writing about the beauty of stars. I ended, telling in what screwed up world we live in. Never give your thoughts free run.
A contest entry
- For Writers Fourteen Or Under by Andy Stephenson.
350 points, ended June 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Am I a bit too repeative and do I drag on for too long about the same old thing? Did you notice any grammar mistakes? If so, could you please tell me?
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You are an excellent writer; I did enjoy your comparisons.
Hi Lize, you seem a very angry young person. This is a rather bitter sounding narrative you have given us. Are you angry because technology has allowed improvements in the way humans live? Or do you despise those who abuse our planet’s resources?
While I agree there are some things not so good but I would never want to live without a lot of other benefits. It’s so comfortable to have central heating and air conditioning
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Technology has given us a longer lifetime and many more ways to improve it
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You are an excellent writer; I did enjoy your comparisons. But wanting to eat stars?
Even though this is some serious business you are taking on, you added a few humorous touches that make your piece fun to read
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Thanks for entering the contest and allowing us to view your work.
Geri
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I don't think I'm angry, I'm cynical and critical. I despise those who abuse the Earth's resources, not the technology. Though I do think technology has replaced some of our humanity for pixels and chips, I indeed am pleased with central heating and air codition.
On that too, I can't disagree with you, though I think in a quite few cases you can better say "technology has given us a longer road if misery".
I'd eat anything
Thanks for the flattering comment n__n
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You want to eat stars...? Lol ^^"
Nice analysis about ignorant arrogant people So, is this your train of thought? Interesting thoughts ^^ Lol, personally, I really hate the sun. Cloudy days all the way! But I get what you're saying.
You really seem disgusted with our race. We are pretty bad sometimes, but even in Da Vinci's time, there were bad people. Just as bad as today. But you forget what makes human kind special in the first place, and that's all the times we show compassion in spite of all the bad stuff. Animals don't do that. Neither does dust.
Lol, I like the footnote there
I think it does ramble a teeny weeny bit, but not annoyingly so. You're just getting across your point of view. and I liked the way this was like your train of thought. Trains of thought are often like this <3
Nice work
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Yeah, I want to eat them. Ghehe x]
I'm not saying that in da Vinci's days there weren't bad people - half the government and Church was corrupt like a duck (are ducks corrupt? Anyway, it sounds cool). I'm just trying to say that we're messing up right now and we keep on rolling like stone, not doing a damn thing about it. And, when we won't put a stop to it we're going to pay for it.
And besides I'm just doing negative, with a part of me being a born pessimist.
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Hmm.
You certainly show a negative view of our planet and our society. Do you feel there is no hope? You have a lofty view of the stars. For English not being your native tongue, you use it pretty well, though you did have some typos. Those you could probably catch with a good proofing. You restated your position about the stars at the end, but I didn't feel you were too repetitive.
Thanks for entering 'For Writers Fourteen Or Under'
Andy
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I don't feel like there's no hope at all, I do think there have to be taken drastic decisions to put a stop to the way we're messing up our planet.
Thanks for the comment (:
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