He looks at her in teary eyes, he thought he loved her but as time went on as their relationship developed he realized when it was too late that he had never loved her.1
‘I… I…erm…’ Katy looked at him in confusion, she loved him however didn’t understand how he could just call of the wedding after a year of being engaged. This was abnormal to her.2
‘I don’t understand Jake’ Katy spat out the words, her voice was in denial and her mind wouldn’t allow herself to think of the ‘ifs’
Jake turned his watery eyes from Katy and looked at the floor.3
‘LOOK AT ME JAKE!’ Katy shouted at her lover in horror, she had scared herself and Jake. He looked at her and frowned, Katy turned around to leave.4
‘I don’t understand either’ Jake begun as Katy walked on, she stopped as soon as he spoke, she waited for him to continue.5
‘I don’t know how to explain this but….’ Jake paused and sighed, Katy rolled her eyes as tears dripped from her.6
‘All I know is that I am not right for you’ Jake finished and stared at Katy’s back, she was wearing a black top with white details and blue jeans. He could see she was wearing the pumps he bought for her, Jake still found her attractive as he bit his lip.7
‘How do you know what’s right for me when I already know its you’ Katy spoke while her back was still facing him, she didn’t turn her head side ways to look at him she spoke ahead as if he was there.8
‘I know I’m not right for you, mainly because I don’t love you enou-’
Jake stopped what he started.
Katy turned around with tears pouring out from her.9
‘You don’t love me…? Katy spoke tearfully to Jake but he just stood there without any feelings what so ever.
He stared at her and continued staring
Author notes
This is a short story I just typed on the PC because I was bored.
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For Contest
**Fave Movie: The Notebook
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- Love Story Options by GossipGirlLuvR.
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Honorable mention
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Boredom never felt the same
Comments
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You should get bored more often. Poor girl, so sad. Boys can be such JERKS!
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Wow. I really like that ending. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.
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The first sentence felt awkward to me. And I wonder if it was because of the missing commas. But that might be just me. You know how bad I am with them so I hestiate to point them out in anyone elses.
But this was very sad. I totally understand what both of them are going through. I've been through both sides.
Hope you've continued with this. Would be interesting to see where you go with it.
Brooke
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This was really sad, but there were some minor grammar problems in the beginning.. It was kind of awkward, I'll be honest. I really enjoyed it, though. You may want to revise and edit some if you plan to continue this. It was a really good piece, though. And really.. Why doesn't he love her? Terribly sad concept. v.v
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why doesnt he love her? what happens? it was really nifty reading it, perfect emotion and timing. Definately realistic
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Hey!!!
You were bored?? Get bored again..... This piece is great. I loved it. Well done. A fabulous job. -
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I hate being bored lol but the writing is good... what a shame right?
Missi
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awesome
hey!!
i dont know how you do it .....but every time i come around and read your stuff............. it just captures my heart.
this was very sad, i could feel the pain for her as if it were my own.
as always you have done a fabulous job.
bless you
take care
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That was sooooo sad.
"I don't love you enou."
"You don't love me...?"
You did this all because you were bored. WOW! The story is nicly written. A short story with lots of pain. Good job! Hehe, mew! -
aww i love this story
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omg wow! this story was wow. I love this! i wish you would write more...
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It's Great!
You just thought of that when you were bored?! Oh my Gosh! You are so good! I want to know what happens between Katy and Jake. I can't believe it. I have to think really hard for things like that to come out. You are a natural born author.beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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Write more stories when you are bored.
Missi...your stories and poems are improving leaps and bounds the past few weeks ! Sure we all have our down times....but girl- This was just unbelievable !!!!
One of the things that caught my attention was that you started a story from a middle of a conversation, rather than having to have the reader read up to where they are now...
With you starting in a conversation like this, you made the reader interested in the argument and want to read more.
There is so much I want to point out that makes this story awesome.....you just made this thing beautiful.
-Hismercy
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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THIS IS SAD
I cannot belive the last lines they made me feel so sad for her.
I liked it
well done miss bored ^.^
Love Blair
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