Gone

White gowns1

Masks2

Beeping3

Pale4

Hands5

Pressing6

Shock7

Tired8

Lights9

Dim10

Noise11

Straight12

Line13

Gone14

You15

Didn't16

Make17

It18

They19

Did20

Everything21

They could22

All....23

Silent

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  • Pixels
    July 27, 2008
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    Wow, I thought that was really good and different. Just to be sure that I got this right this is what happens: A person is saying how someone is badly hurt and they get taken to the hospital and they die?

    It's a little sad but unusual in a good way.


  • kierancluchey
    May 28, 2008

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    Odd

    Odd, but interesting. I'm not particularly thrilled about this story/poem, but it was an interesting read. I don't quite get it. Keep Writing!
    -Kieran


    • Nostalgia
      June 2, 2008
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      Oh, sorry! I thought this was AP, it was just a random scribbling of my thoughts. So sorry! I didn't mean to post it on this site.