Beautiful angels float around me, their wings are as white as snow. I am drifting up towards them, they do not speak yet their dance is so welcoming to me. I catch a glimpse of what lies ahead, large golden gates and the most dazzling blue skies beyond them, huge fluffy clouds like giant marshmallows. I can see a river which looks like a scene from Noah's ark full of animals and birds, with angels in all shapes and sizes, dancing around and splashing in the water. Heaven. Just Heaven.1
Then I begin to fall backwards, Heaven is fading from my eyes. I can hear machines beeping loudly and people shouting. 2
"She's awake, She's awake. We've got her back!"
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A contest entry
- One hundred words, one hundred points by Elvenfairy.
100 points, ended May 29, 2008, 12 entries
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• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whoa!
Whoa, I did not expect her to come back to life! Holy cow, amazing. I loved it. Great! XD
Your are really good writer.
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This was very descriptive. I enjoyed visualizing your thoughts on Heaven. It is so hard to imagine and put into words something this perfect and amazing, I think you did it very well. I am glad that she woke up, yet I would have liked to have known how she *died* in the first place. You can tell she was not angry about being dead, but instead overjoyed by the paradise we call Heaven. Great job & Keep writing!
Chee
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This was very good. I can tell that she wanted to be there in that paradise but that she was brought right back down to life. Very well written. Congratulations with the Gold Trophy there too.
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this entry put a smile on my face. Everyone has a diffrent idea what heaven will be like. Your idea is the halmark one, and you pened it *or in this case typed* very vivdly. Thanks you for entering my contest. I especially liked the ending.
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