it was the end of my love when he walked through the door my heart fell in two i knew it was over from the moment it started.1
I knew we had problems but i thought he had changed than when i did not expect it he said he did not love me i knew it was too long so i fell to the floor and he walked out the door than i remebered he had been so busy to get intimate than i thought to my self was he cheating i felt so miserable.2
it was over i had no one from the stupid things i had done my freind ships were over my parents hated me now it's time to unwind so i left to america than a few weeks later i met my true love .
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Was this romance? Your grammar is very poor in this piece and, though I was vaguely captivated, I don't know if I can accept this. Your capitalization is painful to read... If you fix this up.. Edit, revise, get back to me..
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