They came as Darkness… I was afraid and I prayed, but nothing changed.1
Sometimes I think that God forgot about me… like he was disappointed in me.2
Sometimes I dream that I’m in another place… where no one dies and no one gets hurt, hearts never break and no one falls apart. A place where people can not but Love, where there are no worries that tomorrow might never come, or that if it does you will wish it hadn’t… a place where I can finally find peace in myself… where I can finally look in the mirror without discussed... a place where if I cried it would be for happiness and not for the pain of being abused or violated or hated.3
They came as Darkness… and broke me down until I could be broken no more4
Now I sit here in the dark, alone, worthless and forgotten5
Author notes
This is only my second story on here, I am sort of picky when it comes to my stories, mostly because it feels weird to put something fictional on here, or even write somehitng that never happened., so all the stories I have are personal.
So anyway, its short, but I kind of explained what I wanted to and didn't feel I needed to say more than what I feel emotionaly.
A contest entry
- Surprise Me! by Shadow-Kissed.
300 points, ended May 28, 2008, 11 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
This is my first story on here and I just need to know what you think.
Comments
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Diddo to Hunter
Everyone has different pasts--some similar, some very different. I think a lot of people can relate to that FEELING though. You write things in such a way that people know exactly what you're feeling, and even if the events going on in your stories are things far beyond what people even dream in their worst nightmares, we all can see how you feel when you write this and a sliver of what you felt when this must have happened. It takes a great mind and an even greater gift to be able to evoke those emotions in your readers and get them to feel what you feel. This story makes me want more and more and more because as a reader, I already care so much about the character (you, as it turns out), that I want to know what else happens. Ever thought of compiling this all into a book? Really--brilliant writing.
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Thank you, and no I really haven't, I don't know if I want to though... getting money for something like this... makes me feel strange, though the question has indeed been asked before. I don't know, maybe some day.
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Great work Damian.
That sort of feeling...I may not have been through what you went through...but I know the feeling.
Cheers man,
hunter
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Thanks, for commenting and listening to me groan about everything.lol. thanks.
Damian
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This is really really good. ^_^ One of the best shorts i've seen in a long time. Keep penning and good job.
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Thanks, worked quite hard on this one, though it did some what come to whilst I was sleeping.
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Thanks!
Aye, thank you very much and I will.
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wow
This is really good
Wish you the best of luck in my contest.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thannks...
It sort of came naturally to me.
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