I was given a heart
Only to love you
I was given eyes
Only to see you1
Never did I imagine
This would be my state
In love2
Why do I get the feeling
That although the mood has changed
My heart is untouched3
What stage of love is this?
Where I find no peace
Even for a moment4
The lanes where we fell in love
The cities of our dreams
Everywhere I look
I only see you5
I can't help my feelings
You are the one I have given
My heart and soul to6
It's tough for me to
Live without you7
I breathe
Only to love you8
I have been given eyes
Only to see you...
Author notes
True Love will Never Be the Same
Missi
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Aww, this was beautiful MJ. Is this basedon true life, or is it just a poem.
Nevertheless, it was great.
So beautif and deep.
I love the first stanza. Well done, keep up the good work
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great
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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made me remember the man i love
thanks, it feels like the words have come out of my heart
take care
bless u
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Hm...succinct, but a bit too simple. Didn't dislike it, but not one of your best works. I guess cos the whole "eyes only for you" is getting a bit cliche.
HT -
Great!
Great poem! Liked it, although I`m not one for love poems and stories. It had good flow, although I felt like I had to stop after each verse. Some, just some, verses could use some extra syllables, which might make it flow easier. Still great! I liked it, and I don`t say that very much about love poems and stories. I like a lot of the Imagery.
-Kieran
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