-Leaving Her Behind-

He couldn't believe what he was doing as he crossed the room, pausing to stare silently at the crying girl on the floor in front of him. Her long brown hair spread like a curtain across her face, blue eyes tinted red with the salt of her tears, and stains marking her lightly freckled cheeks. Slowly he shifted kneeling down before the girl, and in a gentle caressing movement he lifted her chin up off her knees. She looked at him and whimpered trying to pull away but his hand stiffened and she froze. 1

"You know this isn't easy for me either...." 2

His velvet voice purred into her ears, sandy blond hair falling delicately around his face and in front of strange fiery red eyes. a delicate smile curled his perfect lips, and then he leaned in kissing her softly. In moments her hand were tangled in his hair, and he eagerly held her tight against his chest. Pulling her closer to him he continued the kiss, longing to want more then just this but knowing he couldn't. Finally he releases her pushing her away from him to look into her tear filled eyes.3

"I am sorry, but I still have to leave...."4

He sighs looking at her and once again the tears flood over.5

"No...no...don't go." 6

She wines, her long finger nails clutching him. Pain clear in her expression. She clings to him refusing to be forced away, the tears flooding over and spilling violently down her cheeks. He frowns and kisses her softly. 7

"I am sorry. I have to." 8

Without another word he lifts her placing a cold hand gently on the back of her neck and soothes her into a light sleep. Placing her gently on the bed he forces him self away from her, the pain now reflecting in his eyes. 9

"I will return...eventually."10

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  • Lenteur
    June 29, 2008
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    :'[[

    aww thats so sad :/ at first i thought her was dumping her.. haha wait.. is he dumping her???? xD

  • Reztolk
    May 27, 2008
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    very good story, sad but good


  • The Vertigo Effect
    May 27, 2008

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    This was very descriptive.
    I really liked it
    It's hard to say good-bye to anyway
    Yet alone by what i'm guessing i person they loved?
    Very nicely written !

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Missi
    May 27, 2008

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    ....GREAT :D

    wow, I really liked the description you used and the emotion was so powerfull
    I could really feel it, I see that this is a contest entry so I hope you win also continue this it is amazing!!



    Missi