GODALIN1
It’s about time that you as our descendants knew the truth.
Haven’t you ever wondered why it took millions of year for humans to get to a point where they were living in caves and socializing?
Then a mere thousand years to believe in a higher power;
And go on to solve technological problems that we still can’t understand today.
I would like to introduce Earth to the planet Godalin. 2
You must look past suspicion, un-trust, ignorance, and false profits.
Take your mind to an empty place.
Let your thoughts be free of any other influence.
Now hear me only, as I take your forward though your history.
Godalin is an unknown water planet.
You might wonder; well, where is this planet? How come we’ve never seen it?
How come we’ve never heard of it?
I n the end of your time you will understand that you have.3
Has it crossed your mind only as whisper or a flash of light, that burning question what is out there?
There are many things beyond your eyes, your ears, your senses, and in time the answers will be known.4
Godalin is located about the same distance from the sun as earth, only, on the opposite side.
It travels around the sun in an elliptical plane and can only be viewed from earth very several thousands of years. 5
There are three landmasses on Godalin each unique in there diversity.
The people of Godalin are made up of three unique races the Chin, the Mylin and the Nads.
Like earth the inhabitants of Godalin grew from their beginning along an evolutionary path; unlike earth the people evolved down three separate lines.
The three lines evolving separately on their own land mass with no knowledge of the other inhabitants.
Although they are equal intelligence, that’s where their similarities end.
The Chins from their beginning are a warrior race where the strongest rule and all other bow to that rule or die.
The Mylins are a peaceful race whose sole purpose is to love their fellow man and where no one is greater than the next.
The Nads are basic nomads where the men live in solitude and herd the females into groups called herns solely for mating and there is no societal structure.
As time went on as it had on earth the Godalins began to explore their world and discovered each other and slowly began to trade and eventually developed into a global society.6
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The Godalins ware advanced in agriculture, science, and technology.
There agriculture consists mostly of genetically cultured fruit, and grains most abundant in the chin regions of Godalin.
The animals used for consumption are most abundant in the Mylin region of Godalin. The Nads region of Godalin was very different, vary dry, and mostly diverse of consumable drinking water.
These indifferences similar to earth forced the nations into trading and communicating early in there evolution.8
After several wars over witch region was the most dominant they negotiated and developed a world society with a common language called tonge.
Never to be spoken by the common people, only leaders, trade negotiators, and the science community were aloud to use the language. This was done to protect the cultures of the three powers so that no one power could dominate the others.9
Godalin like earth is populated with entities like those on earth; there are animals, plants and humans.
The humans on Godalin are as diverse as the population of earth today, but were about 1,000 year further along in their evolution than we are on earth.
The Godalins had three world powers the Chin, the Mylin, and the Nads.
Each of these powers had their own distinct language, culture and worships.
At about the same time, earth’s humans were still in the Stone Age living in caves. The people here were concerned mainly with survival. 10
The Godalins meanwhile had already developed knowledge to a point one step farther we have today.
The Godalin sciences were involved in genetic engineering to the point where they had developed the ability to turn a human gene into a radio wave receptor.
This allowed a scientist through the use of a computer to communicate with an implanted subject without the use of mechanical means.
Being a gene rather than a computer chip allowed the gene to become like any other gene in the body and this gene would be past on to an offspring. This was only done with in the scientific community again to protect the culture of each race. 11
The technology of the day was in space exploration.
At this point in their orbit they were coming around the east side of the sun where they began to explore the shrin galaxy.
The shrin galaxy is made up of a sun several planets and moons, but were not found to be inhabitable by the Godalins.
For 1000 years Godalin made progress in space in the same way as we have here on earth.12
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Then it happened! A magnetic solar storm was developing in their region of space. Heading toward Godalin, it was estimated by the scientific community, that this storm was powerful enough if it should hit Godalin full force it would change its orbit by a trinc on earth 10 solar years. 14
It was also agreed should this happen it might put them on a collision coarse with the outer atmosphere of a planet they called Mars.
In the year 9000 BC earth time the solar storm hit Godalin full force.
On Godalin itself, it was very difficult, there were storms, and title waves, one third of Godalins land mass and nearly half of the inhabitants were destroyed over a period of ten years. 15
When the storm past the Godalin central world government began to rebuild.
It took 500 years before every thing was back in working order.
Now the scientific community was faced with the increasing possibility that they would indeed pass though the outer atmosphere of mars.16
According to the science community this would once again destroy one third of Godalin. The central government declared that Godalin would now divert 100% of its resources to space exploration.
The Godalins began to send probes to all the planets, and moons within there reach, at the same time the Godalin space agencies began work on three major crafts one belonging to each region of Godalin. These crafts would send scientists to any place that was inhabitable.17
It was now 8000 BC earth time the Godalins receive information from a probe showing that there was a planet about 50 year from there current location this planet they called earth.
In the year 8000 BC Space was mostly unknown to the inhabitants of earth.
It was something to look at and wonder about, but not something the inhabitants took very seriously.
At this time what we now have labeled humans were no different than the rest of the inhabitants of what we now refer to as earth.
Al the creatures of earth were preoccupied with survival, finding food and shelter and little else.
The Godalin probes tested the atmosphere computation and to study life on earth. The result came back that the Godalins could inhabit the planet and that the life forms would not pose a serious problem to the science teams.18
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The science teams consisted of 500 scientists from all over the planet as well as 1000 support staff. The teams would be divided by culture and leave GODALIN in three ships. The ship would land at three predetermined locations on the new planet. Each ship was to land on one of the three largest landmasses on the new planet.
One ship was to land on the most densely inhabited landmass at its center now known as Africa. The second ship was to land on a landmass with very little inhabitance and as close to the ocean as possible now known South America. The third ship would land in a place very different from the other two in that the atmosphere would be cold now known as northern china. This endeavor was calculated to take 50-earth year to complete. So the plans were completed and the ships sent out. During the journey one generation would come and go.
When the ships reached earth the team had changed in that most of the team were young and inexperienced and the balance old and unable to contribute anything other than knowledge. Though this had been calculated and the home planet could still communicate though the use of the radio telepathy there were problems. They did land were they had planed and began to explore the new world. We begin with the ship landing in China. The Godalins in this group were mostly made up of Chins a culture from the northern regions of Godalin. The leader of this group was a man by the name of Chah.
Author notes
Need lots of feed back; don’t know if there’s a category that fits.
I need to turn each line into a paragraph;
Comments
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I think you could enter Science fiction and fantasy. You can always change it later as the story progresses and develops.
You have a lot of small spelling errors which you would need to change in your next edit. They are only small, but they do stand out as your sentence construction is very good.
I really enjoyed reading this. It flowed, presented a very clear picture and was intriguing.
I'm very pleased to meet you John.
Lis.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Per your authors notes, the category seems to be sci-fi. You have written a very interesting story. Even though it is fantasy and there is quite a bit of information to take in, it was pretty easy to follow and get a feel for. I enjoyed reading it.
Keep writing and welcome to the site


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very scientific. i like it :]. keep writing~
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This sort of sounds sci-fi to me...but not sure. Very well written with brilliant detail...It could turn into an amazing story...not sure it's strong enough as a stand alone. If that is what it is. Very well done! I enjoyed reading it~




