Silver nights

First week of june, I had gone to the coast of Rode island for no reason I had taken a week off from my job packed some things and got in the car in the middle of the night. After a 2 hour drive I was standing on a beach waitng for the sun to rise. Wind blowing in my face I smiled as I could feel the sea salt kiss my skin from the wind. 1

At 21 I was doing pretty well from most standards I had a apartment of my own in New York City just above a small Cafe. I had a old Satern that ran fine and had great gas milliage and gas being six bucks a gallon was the reason I was up this far. I am a writer by night and a cook by day for rent and food. I had at this time never published anything I had a few hundred starting ideas a parpagraph to short chapter no more then 10 pages peer idea. I just could never find anything to write about not enough life lived I guess.2

After a short walk down the beach i found some swing sets leaning against thee cold poll I took out my guitar. I have been playing guitar since i was ten and still loved it. 3

It was midnight when i though of a song to play and sing quietly.
I shut my eyes and began to play the words comming easy thee melody singing from the strings. I heard the swings creak above the wash of the waves. Then a quiet voice began to sing with me. 4

Your faith was strong but you needed proof
You saw her bathing on the roof
Her beauty and the moonlight overthrew you
She tied you
To a kitchen chair
She broke your throne, and she cut your hair
And from your lips she drew the Hallelujah5

Baby I have been here before
I know this room, I've walked this floor
I used to live alone before I knew you.
I've seen your flag on the marble arch
Love is not a victory march
It's a cold and it's a broken Hallelujah6

Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah7


I looked up sparkling greens eyes met my soft brown, a spark was set a fire lit. Blood pounded in my heart, a smile crept to my lips as i kept singing to this beauty before me under a silver moon. 8

9

I did my best, it wasn't much
I couldn't feel, so I tried to touch
I've told the truth, I didn't come to fool you
And even though
It all went wrong
I'll stand before the Lord of Song
With nothing on my tongue but Hallelujah10

Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah11

For a min we said nothing, thee moon light shineing off her red hair. I smile 12

I'm Joseph. 13

I'm Victoria she replied with a shy smile. 14

I stand up brushing sand from my jeans and put my guitar away. 15

"care for a walk?"16

With out a word she takes my hand and starts to walk down thee deserted moon lit beach. 17

That night we fell in love.

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  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    May 25, 2008

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    Run-on sentences where you miss out periods, like first sentence para 2.

    1st line in para 8 is run-on too.

    greens/green.

    Hm...tad brief, but it is still unfinished, so that's cool.

    You may want to use speech matrks for dialogue, though.

    HT