Looking back now,
I detest everything about you.
Left me feeling like a clown,
Hoping all of this would end soon.1
You left me in the dark.
Left me feeling like a child.
Left me behind, but left your mark.
Now you're living free and wild.2
You said you loved me,
I was too stupid to doubt,
Then you left me,
For a reason I don't know about.3
I look back now,
I see it was all a lie.
You may not like the sound of it,
But maybe your "love" should die.4
Our "love" was a fake.
Little affection for me.
Too much love to make
with a man that was not me5
A mistake is what I made.
No time to think.
Your silent seduction made me obey.
You dishonor pushed me to my brink.6
Now I say nevermore
I say goodbye
To an old paramour.
Have fun with you new guy
Author notes
I wrote this thinking about one of my exs who was under my suspicion of cheating
A contest entry
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Comments
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Very sad, the emotion comes out strong. The pain lies can cause is a terrible thing to experience. A great entry for the contest.
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nice job, how depressing, i am very sorry for your loss, but you wrote a nice poem about it, so thats a pro :]
hope you get all this cleared up and move on to something so much better!
snaps and good luck!
Alyana -
Aww, this was about Kat? :[
I'm sowwy about that, but I hope you feel better about that now n.n
Look not to the past for bad memories,
But to the future for new memories to come :3
This poem was very fluent(sp?) and easy to read. The emotion used in it was exellent, and the grammar was almost perfect.
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Yeah, hun, this one is about Kat. And Of course I feel better now! I have you! <3
I no longer look to the past, for you give me happiness. ^_^
as for the grammar: a wonderful invention called spell check XP
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I like this it didn't seem chopy, the rhyme was even and well controlled. Over all it was a wonderful poem. You forgot to put a period at the end of stanzas five and seven. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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