Distant Lovers - 5

Well the morning could not come quick enough. Mace & Poppy were both fired up. Looking to see if any one would reconize the picture Poppy drew of the woman. Well at the train depot there was a man that swore he had seen her on the same day Mace's beloved Lily was found dead. Mace left the train station angry. Poppy was hungry...1

Poppy looked bewildered, and her heart inadvertently knew it was Eve. Now she knew this woman was no joke. She was good hard working woman that also knew all the tricks of the trade. She'd been a saloon girl; before she fell for Trace. She also knew Trace was in love with Poppy. Now Poppy wonder if she would come after her sister. 2

After getting rid of her sister it stands to reason; she will be after her next. Poppy was set on making her pay for killing her only sister. That morning in the great hall of the boarding house. Breakfast was served, in walked Mace. He
was carring a basket of flowers. 3

Well we have to get going its a about a 1 hours of hard riding to our favorite spot. This was the place where Lily had promised to give herself to him. When they marry. She had a dream; that Mace dreamed of so often.4

After Poppy ate and Mace had black coffee this morning, he was ready to go. So they gathered the gear and went outside. The sun was bright, sky a mixture of blue/gray. It was partly cloudy. "Looks like it might rain..Mr. Mace" said Poppy. "Naw I have never missed a day putting fresh flowers once a week since she left me" said Mace.5

They both rode out....they were almost there when Mace notice some wagon wheels cutting along the trail.6

He didn't say one word just watch the tracking. He was sure they were fresh tracks. He wasn't surprised when he found a wagon parked not far from her grave. Questions arose; "Who in hell was here? What did they want? and Why at his Lily's graveside?" run out of his mouth with excitememt. 7

Poppy nearly screamed, "Its her, it's Eve..." Mace face turned red as fire and he walked up to the woman...looked her dead in the eyes. Plus she looked right back at him.8

She had place a flower on Lily's grave. Mace bellowed out
"Why did you kill her?. Eve turned with tears in her eyes.
"I didn't it was my child. He did it because he wants his father to make us a real family" spoke Eve. "Where is he now" asked Mace. Poppy flew into the woman screaming calling her a lier. Mace pulled her off Eve. 9

"It should of been me to die. Trace was always in love with me" said Poppy to Eve. "I know but you and your sister look so much a like Trace Jr. didn't know you were twins. Plus he was so tired of the other children calling hims names. I'm sorry Miss. Poppy." Eve said again. "I need to find that boy" said Mace.10

(more coming soon)11

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a love story

This is part number 5,

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  • Brazos
    August 17, 2008
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    Honey, throughout this chapter and others, you need to correct "borden house" to "boarding house". Just something to watch for...

    Love you,
    Brazos

  • mcfreeman
    August 10, 2008
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    Good story

    but...the voice..is a narrator's, then it is Poppy's without a transition sentence or paragraph...the plot should evolve slowly without explanation...I like the characters and your details are great...knowledgeable and in the right places...so storyteller should be in control, like a Zane Grey.

  • Brazos
    May 28, 2008

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    Well, ok, now you've got me hooked, I'll have to go looking for the first four parts now and really catch up with the story. You made me feel like I might have been there, I like that.

    I love you,
    Brazos


  • Reaver Greeters member
    May 23, 2008

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    Bravo!!

    Very well done I saw some grammar mistakes, but won't harp I enjoyed the story line and the way you structured it. It was a very good read....thanks! Bravo!!