There’s a sickness is this world that can’t be stopped by anyone.1
It makes you change in ways you don’t want to2
It makes you think in ways that aren’t you3
It will find you no matter what you do4
It will make you jealous and jaded5
It can end up making you despised and hated6
This sickness makes our friends in to enemies7
It makes some go mad and some others glad8
When it infects you there is nothing you can do9
You can’t kill this sickness because it will kill you10
If you struggle and cry it will make you die11
If you want to know what the name of the sickness is 12
Just look inside of yourself and you tell me!!! 13
Author notes
Um For contest ruls I will say (Too Young To Die)
A contest entry
- Whatever You Want by Shadow-Kissed.
225 points, ended July 20, 2008, 16 entries
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thatz so0o0o0o0o0o0o0 gud!!!!!
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wow!!! YOU should totaly place in the contest....wait I'm in that contest,damn it,oh well I really liked it! GOOD LUCK!!!!!
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well done
This was amazing. i wish you the best of luck in the contest. And thanks for reading the rules and following them,
Good job with the rhyming too LOVED IT
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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This poem reminds me of some of the stuff I've written. There is a word missing in line 4, but the one word does not detract from the message.
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Sorry but I’m not sure there is, but if you think I need to add something I don’t mind all help is welcomed
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"It will find you no matter what do"
There isn't supposed to be a you after the what? Oh well, it's your poem. You can add or take out whatever words you want *nods* And glad to see that I can be of some help. -
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sorry your right somtimes
i see things that are not there -
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Lol. No worries. You are not the only one
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wow that was pretty awesome =]. but theres a typo in line nine *rolls eyes* sorr i tend to point this kind of stuff out lol! hmm i think the sickness is jelousy or insecurites .. =D well done!
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----looks inside--->
Okay so my sickness is bones, blood and organs... nice job making me paranoid >.< Lmao
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