(the world is a curious thing)

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There is a time of day when everything seems to stop, the world gets quiet, and it seems as though you are the only one around for miles. For the first time, you realize how small you are, and you call out just to hear the echo. Darkness engulfs the sky in a cloud of black, and the sun is traded for the moon, stars seemingly hand placed across the night. If you held your hand in front of your face you couldn’t see it, but looking up, you can see for lifetimes. After a while, the silence begs to be broken, and you long to hear the cicadas’ song again. At night, we have to remember that we all lie beneath the moon’s shadow.2

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Written for 'For Writers Fourteen and Under'.
Thanks for recognizing the younger writers on here.

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  • Simply Beautiful
    June 4

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    Really good. I love the description here! I also think that this wouldn't read very well in this format.

    -CC


  • Sekhmet Kitty
    May 30

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    I don't think that it reads well in verse, it would be much better in a simple paragraph because it just continues as a story would. You could add to this as a story and continue with it; I believe it would turn out very well. I like what you said and how you said things in this; very creative and interesting.
    Nice Write!


    • miles of smiles
      May 30
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      Hmmm. Good point. I'll look in to it. Thank you for your suggestions and compliments!


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    May 21

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    You're welcome.

    This reads like a poem. In fact it is very poetic. There are colorful words and phrases. I like the feeling that you bring out in this piece. It reminds me of when I was on a ship in the middle of the Atlantic watching the stars and listening to Every Good Boy Deserves Favor by the Moody Blues.

    Thanks for entering 'For Writers Fourteen Or Under'.

    Andy


  • Richard Paranoia
    May 20

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    Beautiful

    That's beautiful. Simple and beautiful. 'course, I'm a sucker for all that sun, moon, stars mumbo jumbo, but it seems that you use it so well in this piece. In fact, I wish you would elaborate, make it longer. Fantastic job.

  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    May 20

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    You handle lyrical writing with a nice flow

    Hi Sarah, thanks for entering the contest with this lovely poem. You are a talent young writer. Do you write prose this well ?

    You handle lyrical writing with a nice flow, making it easy to follow and fun to read.

    The clear and attractive descriptions capture the imagination so your reader can ‘See’ and feel part of the scenes while they enjoy the experience.

    Good luck in the contest

    Geri


    • miles of smiles
      May 20
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      haha, i hope i write prose this well! why don't you tell me... *hint, hint, CHECK IT OUT!* haha. just kidding. well, thanks for the comment!


  • Dreams of Insanity
    May 19

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    Wow.....this was AMAZING!
    Chyeah, you got some talent! You blow me out of the water, Sarah...geez I wish I were this good at your age!
    Great job and good luck in the contest!

  • trackrunnengirl24
    May 19
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    wow i liked it... good job!


  • moon road
    May 19

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    SSSAAARRRAAAHHH!!! This was absolutely amaaaazziinnngg!!!

    i don't know what else to say that i haven't said before. for a writer, i really suck at commenting. !

    ericaxoxo!!!


  • Hismercy
    May 19

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    Gnomie....This was written so beautifully !!

    I know this contest was for a specific purpose, yet this was just plain awesome !

    -Hismercy

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