Noé didn’t speak a lot of English. The little words he knew were pronounced sloppily. Sometimes he sounded retarded when trying to speak English. Instead of correcting him, people would laugh at him. It was a barbaric thing to do. But they just didn’t understand the fact he was from another country. They mocked his language, his country and made fun of the way he looked.1
To me Noé was so very handsome. Deep blue eyes like the ocean that I wished to drown in, full lips that complimented his perfect smile and clear tanned skin that looked so smooth. His skin seemed as if it had never been bruised, scarred or touched by acne. Brown hair flowed straight at shoulder length, gleaming in even the dimmest light. Absolutely gorgeous.2
I watched how jerk guys whispered things to their friends about him while waving and smiling at him. He didn’t really know what they were saying about him. Noé just smiled and waved back. Then he walked over to their table. “Ah, this seat is taken,” one guy said, just as Noé was going to sit. Everyone at the table began laughing at him just to make him feel uncomfortable. It worked because his smiled faded as he walked away.3
This is your chance, my mind was shouting. I swore I could hear angels telling me to go over to him. Hesitantly, I walked over to him, pondering what to say. Though he was bad at speaking English, he understood basic things, which was very good. I didn’t know how that was possible but obviously, it was.4
His back was to me as he searched for a place to sit. I bit my lip, nervously. My palms got sweaty. I didn’t know what to say. But someone controlled my lips and forced me to speak before it was too late. “Noé,” I said softly. Finally I’d said something. I felt accomplished. 5
He turned, smiling at me as he did to everyone. His teeth were so perfect. Pearly white and in straight rows. His lips looked so soft and gentle. How could someone be so…gorgeous.6
What was I doing? I couldn’t remember as I stared into his eyes. I was getting lost in those glittering eyes. So badly I wanted to just stare in his eyes while my hands were in his hair for days. 7
“Yes?” he said, breaking my moment. His German accent was so kind and soft. How could anyone make fun of the way he speaks?8
“Umm…wanna sit…I don’t know…with umm…me?” I stuttered. Oh God, I sounded so stupid. I was the one that seemed to not know the English language.9
He nodded, understanding my offer. It was one of the basics he understood. I turned and smiled while leading him to the table where I was sitting with my friends. 10
When my friends saw Noé sit in front of me, they gave him disturbing looks. Luckily he was starting on his hamburger, not paying any attention to us. I looked at all their faces. They were staring at me with their you-can’t-be-serious face. I bogusly smiled at them, hoping they’d smile back. But none of them did. 11
I knew the worst would be of the situation. My friends weren’t too friendly at all. 12
Avery stood, grabbing her tray. She walked away. After her went: Ava, Amelia, Megan and Jennifer. Now, it was only me and Noč. 13
When I looked at him, he was looking down sadly, not eating anymore. I sighed. I know my friends leaving made him feel like it was his fault. Why did my friends have to be mean like everyone else? They were always talking about they were different from everyone else. But them avoiding Noč was them being the same as everyone. Mean. 14
“Noé,” I started, waiting for him to look at me, but he didn’t. “It’s not your fault they left.”15
“It tis.” In his voice was sadness. Maybe he felt like he’d never fit in. But I knew one day people would notice him, looking past the fact he’s not an American. They’d notice his charm and gorgeousness and the way he smiled so friendly. He’d just have to wait. It would happen.16
“Don’t worry about everyone else. Just keep being yourself.” Usually I wasn’t the one to give advise but I think I was doing pretty good. “You’ll get by.”17
He shook his head despondently. His eyes were glittering. Were those tears? I bit my lower lip slightly. I was hoping he wasn’t going to cry. “Cuse me.” He got up from the table walking out the lunch room.18
Go after him! He needs to be comforted! My heart was yelling, going out for him. I knew what he was feeling. When I transferred to this school from another school as a freshmen, everyone was so cruel. Imagine how much crueler they are to someone that’s not even from this country. 19
I began to go after him, on my way out the cafeteria doors. Someone grabbed my arm. It was Ava. “Leave him. He has no place here and never will.”
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You need to make a proper ending for this! And make this into a bigger story! I really like this, good highschool story which is one of the things I asked for. I enjoyed this and hope you make more. Good luck in my contest. -
It's good but theirs no ending xD
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I'm really, really glad that you entered this in my contest. It was so sad, but very heartfelt. I thought it was very well written, and I absolutely love your descriptions. It seemed to me that you managed to say a lot with only a few words. So basically, to sum it up, I'm impressed. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Awwes how sad! This was so nice of the character to try to make friends with Noe and I am sad it didn't work. Poor Noe. This is very well written and I would love to see what happens next between the character and Noe. Personally I would be happy if she made friends with Noe despite everything. haha.
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Wow it's well written. It's sad but most definately shows what people are like in our world today. I really enjoyed it thanks for entering it.
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Sad but KEEP WRITEN!!!!!!
beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 5, ending: 2, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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kool and sad!!!!!
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Amazing
Loved it. It was sad, and I like the emotion sad in stories. If you're having trouble thinking of story ideas, here's what I do. I read over my previous chapter, begin to think about the ending, then see where I might start the next time. If I still can't think of anything, I'll write other stories in between. Something will come to ya!
Can't wait for Part 2!
-Kieran
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Great!
wow, when i read "It worked because his smiled faded as he walked away." I actually felt my heart sink! really touching story! Whats next? -
This really does show how nasty teenagers can be, actually that people can be. In a way, it was a nice story, to see the narrator be nice to Noé, try to be friends with him. The last line just sums it up “Leave him. He has no place here and never will.” Paragraph two was the highlight of the piece, when the narrator said how much she liked him, his eyes etc.
Good read.
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how racist..
..and mean people can be.
i sometimes thank God for being homeschooled.
somehow it is impossible to me to understand how humans can be so cruel to others.
i hope Noe can get along just fine! keep writing!
cheers
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I'm having problems starting a new chapter of this =(
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i like this story, i can't wait for the next chappter
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Oh my. So sad and heart breaking! More than once I gasped at how everyone else treated Noe (ah couldn't find the awesome accent mark). You made Noe seem so real and sweet that I fell in love with him.
I have a few itches that I would like to convey.
I couldn't really tell if your character was male or female, what grade, where they lived besides in America, or any other things.
I belive that you could totally add more to this and make it so more realistic and heart breaking. Maybe add some more on her (I assume the person whos p.o.v we are in is a female) or other things.
Love it!
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Aww, this is really good. I felt bad for Noe... I know what it's like to not fit in and have people lie to your face. Very well-written. Great job on this!
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