Maybe I'm in love

Jonas picked up the phone and dialed the numbers that would initiate the conversation that would instigate the confrontation that he had been trying to have for the last few days. Listening to the ringing, his heart started beating. He was nervous as hell, but he had to do this.1

The sound of "Hello?" that ensued was one of the loveliest sounds that Jonas had ever heard, and he almost didn't answer Jessica.2

"Jessica? This..is Jonas..."3

"Oh..Hi Jonas.."4

The phone call was unlike the million others that Jonas had made over the last year with Jessica. It was unlike it in only one way. A few weeks ago Jessica had said the three words to Jonas that meant everything. And Jonas didn't say them back. Jonas just looked at her as his heart did backflips, but he couldn't say those words back to her. It had been two weeks since he had talked to Jessica. Now he was trying to fix that problem.5

"Umm...how are you?" Jonas asked, trying to by time. What Jonas realized was that he was afraid to say those words to her. He was scared because he didn't want to hurt her. He knew that if he told her he loved her, he would mean it, but he wanted to explain to her now why he didn't say it in the first place.6

"I'm great Jonas. How are you?" Jessica asked, her breathing audible over the phone line as she waited for his answer.7

"I'm good Jessica..Look..there's something I want to say.."8

"Jonas. I don't want to hear it. Not unless you truly mean it. If your not in love with me then you don't need to lie and say that you are." Jessica said, her voice firm trying to get Jonas to not say what he was ready to say.9

"But Jessica, maybe I am in love. I mean, I have it all figured out now. I mean, I thought about it and added everything up. From the lack of sleep and the bloodshot eyes, to the nervous kiss and the butterflies, I think it means I love you jessica. And now that I havn't seen you in so long, I shake and burn like an addict, and if I said that your smile's all that mattered...would you save my life?"10

Silence followed the little speech Jonas made, and he was worried that what he said hadn't been enough to convince Jessica.11

"Jonas...I...I don't know what to say...I love you..I love you so much..." Jessica said, and Jonas could almost hear the tears of joy rolling down her cheeks.12

"I love you Jessica. I love you..I really really love you..."13

AUTHORS NOTES!14

Ok, so, this is for your contest! and its the very first option obviously. To me this feels like i could turn it into some kind of novel perhaps..but for now i hope this is good enough for your contest! Enjoy!

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  • lesbian-in-love
    October 14

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    This was really good and very enjoyable to read.I enjoyed it.Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest. Keep up the good work!


  • nixers
    May 27, 2008

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    AAH! So cute! I love it! It's short but not too short. The perfect length in which you manage to fit everything. I really enjoyed reading this.

    I would have liked it if you could have made Jonas's speech a bit longer so that we could hear more of how much he liked her. Otherwise, I think that this is a brilliant piece of writing. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • whatami
    May 26, 2008

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    You definately could write this as a novel! Really great start! Man, I would give almost anything to have that kind of convers! It began hesitantly, but grew in dynamic. Great job, and good luck!