Blood and Thunder: Part 3: Samuel's Blood

Warning: Content may be inappropriate for younger children.1

Blood and Thunder: Part 3: Samuel's Blood2

The man woke up to sobs and tears of pain, and depression. Beside him was a boy, small, no older than 8 or 9. What was he crying about? I feel sorry, maybe I can help. What if it’s bad? Can’t be... can it?3

“Hey...” he finally inquired and the boy looked up at him, puzzled. Like the child had seen him before. But he hadn’t seen the boy before. Who was he?4

“D-” Tom stumbled to say. “Dad?” he examined the man’s face, a cheerful expression swept over his face and he almost fell out of his bed. “It’s you!”5

“Dad?” I can’t be his father, he thought. But, I don’t remember anything before this. Could he be? I don’t remember. The man’s thoughts squirmed. His memories trying to be released, but the lock wouldn’t budge. “I can’t be your father, I don’t remember you.”6

Tom took a strange look at him. Like: ‘What are you talking about?! How can you not remember me?!’ “But, you have to be my dad.” he sniffled again, and laid down sobbing once more.7

The man looked over at him. Samuel wanted to remember, but the man just couldn’t find the memories. He lay down on the bed. His head rested against the pillow, he fell into a deep sleep. Thoughts entwined, he dreamed of his past.8

“Fran, get down!” Samuel whispered “Get the kids and get out as quickly as you can.” Francesca started talking but Samuel wasn’t listening. He was too busy pushing his children out the door. “Run, and don’t stop until you know you’re safer then you are here!” he screamed, when the murderous figure behind him lashed Samuel with a rough piece of electrical cord. The plug dug into his flesh and his knees gave out. Tim standing behind him, broad shoulders and strength of a champion, kicked Samuel’s back with his steal toe.9

“TIM!” Samuel cried. “It’s me, Sam, remember!?” Tim didn’t, his eyes glowed a eerie bright green. Samuel quickly rolled to his side and crawled backwards out into his yard. “Tim Christopher Alder!” Samuel kept inching backward desperately. “Tim, please, you can’t do this!” Tim didn’t say a word, didn’t even make a sound. He held a kitchen knife in his hand, already blood encrusted. Samuel looked around then he felt a cold metal surface under his palm. “If you won’t listen to reason...” Samuel grunted. “...then listen to this!” Samuel with what strength he had, wield a shovel. He stumbled a bit as he got up, Tim only a few feet away.10

Tim took one swipe at Samuel. The knife just barely scraping his hand. Samuel took a swing at Tim, hitting him head on with the razor shovel. Tim stumbled, this time muttering cusses under his breath. Samuel this time, running straight on adrenalin, took one last swing in hammering motion. Tim lay on the ground moaning.11

‘What now...’ Samuel ran into the house. The phone was busted as was the kitchen, living room, and hallway. He looked around for something to aid him. Nothing. All of a sudden his back went numb, possibly from the kick. He stumbled towards the washroom. Braking the drawers open looking for pain medication, he grabbed a bottle of Tylenol. When Samuel made it back into the kitchen, he saw Tim at the back door, holding his head.12

“Samuel...” Tim growled. “...die!” Tim ran at Samuel the tripped over his make-shift whip. His face hit the floor and he was knocked unconscious. Samuel ran out of the house, police cars and vans outside his house, but no cops. No one in sight.13

Wait, what was that over there! A person? Samuel ran to it, then halted. What did lay in front of him was a young woman. In a blood spattered mess, Samuel was sick for a moment. But he dry-heaved, nothing was in him after that harsh attack. The sun was coming up, the sky glowed bright red, he looked into it, and what did he see? Bodies, upon bodies. All dead, and dark red fluids flowing down the street. It was like hell had taken the earth.14

The man woke up gasping, choking on his own breath. The nurse came into the room, she screamed and called for a doctor. Samuel’s cuts were bleeding and his bruises were deep purple, he was in shock. Tom witnessed his... father, being held down and relaxed, until he could breath again.15

“What happened!” the doctor hastily questioned Samuel.16

“I- I don’t know, one moment I was dreaming and the next...” The man gasped once more, then took in a deep breath.17

“Carla, look after him, I don’t trust his state, if he does this again, we’ll have to look more into this. For now we can leave him.” the doctor ordered. “Excuse me Tom, press the red button if he starts up again.”18

‘Tom?’ the man looked over. His thoughts were broken open and untwisted. He became Samuel again. “Tom!” Samuel yelled. He got up and ran to his son’s bed. Hugging him, and brushing his hair with his fingers. “I haven’t seen you for so long!” he hesitated, he looked at Tom’s leg, it was in a cast. “Tommy?... Why are you in the hospital?”19

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“So, Bethany, what did you do while...” Fran paused, she thought of what she could say. “While you were there? You know what I’m talking about?”21

“They locked us in a cage. They only let us out when we needed the bathroom.” Bethany complained.22

“They didn’t, touch you... did they?” Fran asked.23

“No.” Bethany answered. “All they did was talk, and talk.” she wined. “They said something about Dad, and Tim.”24

Fran looked at Bethany with a look I can’t even describe.25

‘My Samuel, where is he!?’ “What did they say, hunny?” she almost desperately questioned. ‘Is he alright, or did the bastard kill him!? Oh god, please...’26

“Something about Dad running, and a shovel. Mommy, did Tim hurt Daddy?” Bethany looked up with a puppy face.27

‘What do I say???’ “I’m sure Daddy’s fine hunny.” Fran quickly answered “Go to bed it’s late. Here, I’ll read you a story.”28

“When are we visiting Tommy?”29

“Tomorrow hunny... tomorrow.”30

***31

Thunder cracked and the windows shook. Tom couldn’t fall asleep, but Samuel had already dozed off. Tom looked out the window, lightning lit the streets below. Thunder rumbled his ear drums. They were right below the storm. Fork lightning struck somewhere off in the distance, then Tom saw someone on the street. ‘How odd’ he thought. ‘Who walks the street in a thunder storm... at night?’ then he recognized the figure. “D...Da...” he stammered “Dad!”32

*33

“I must find Fran!” Samuel screamed into the sun rise. He was running down the road. He spotted his parents’ house. It was lime-ish yellow in colour. It scared him to possibly see his parents dead, but he went in anyways.34

“Anyone home!?” he yelled but then remembered he was being chased. He shut the door behind him, and walked into the kitchen. He tip-toed up to the sink. Then he heard something behind him.35

“How dare you come into my home...” she would have continued but instead she hit Samuel in the back of the head with his former childhood baseball bat. The impact knocked out a couple teeth and he broke a couple of fingers while trying to grab something to hold on to.36

“Darling, NO!” Samuel’s father came in, “that’s our son!”37

“Samuel was still awake, but just so tired. His mind was hazy. “Wh-Wha happened?”38

“How many fingers am I holding up? Who am I?” his mother asked.39

“3, mom, my head hurts. What happened, why am I here, shouldn’t I be somewhere...?” Clank, and the jail was locked. Memories trapped in a steal cage.40

“Oh, god, he might have some memory loss.” his father could tell, after working with people who suffered from memory loss, for most his life. “Ok, get a pillow, and when he wakes up, we’ll need to try to trigger his memory with something.” he panted. Then sighed. A long silence came on, then Samuel’s father finally spoke: “Tim’s probably after him, judging by the way he’s cut and bruised. We should keep a look out, hopefully he doesn’t pick this house.”41

The father got up, and looked out the window. “Tim was such a nice boy.”42

*43

“DAD!” screamed Tom, but Samuel was too deep in dream. Lightning lit the hallways, a shadow was on the wall. It portrayed a large, broad shouldered man. The shadow grew larger and larger. Finally a hand curved over the frame of the door. Tom screamed.

Author notes

I think I'll take a break from Blood and Thunder. I'll get back to it when I feel I've got a good idea.

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  • DreamerDragon
    May 25, 2008

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    I think this is getting better and better. I hope Tim doesn't get Tom. That'll be so sad. It's cool that Tom and Samuel are together though. I wonder what'll happen next...


  • xoxKokaygirlxox
    May 24, 2008

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    Hmm...it was interesting but i got lost alot it was really good but at times it got really confusing and i got lost..nice work


  • xXSnickiesXx
    May 19, 2008

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    Hm..

    Skills.... you have skills. I was a little confused but as I looked back, I tried placing two and two together.. I got a pretty good grip on what was happening... Good luck with the contest X_O


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    May 19, 2008
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    Confused.

    I was confused. I never figured out what was going on or why. Perhaps it would have helped to have read the earlier parts of this story. I think a little description of your characters might help. There seemed to be a lot of action taking place in this story.

    Thanks for entering 'For Writers Fourteen Or Under'.

    Andy

    • kierancluchey
      May 19, 2008

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      Parts 1, and 2.

      Well, I can only enter one, and I felt like I should be judged on this one, and not the others. SO... this presents a problem, I can however conjoin my stories, but that would go over the limit.


  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    May 18, 2008

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    The pace of this story is terrific

    Hi Kieran, thank you for entering the contest .

    Did you ask what did I miss—I do believe I missed some good scary stuff by not reading the first two parts?

    You have it all going for you, good action, just enough description, logical dialogue that fits the activity taking place .

    The pace of this story is terrific; I didn’t pause once in the reading.

    Now why spill cold water on this? Well, it’s a thing called making a manuscript publisher friendly . The only way you can do that is through corrections and rewrites. That means edit your own writing. Find the goofs before they can turn off a critic.

    Unless you’ve learned the trick of doing it, don’t use similar names for characters . At one point I do believe you have Tom attacking his dad instead of Tim . The best thing to do is change one of their names to Pete or Jim.

    Please keep writing

    Geri

    • kierancluchey
      May 18, 2008
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      Tom Tim

      No, can't find any mix ups, but I'll tell you what I'll do. I'll start from now on, calling Tom, Tommy. It should fix up any confusion I have, or the readers have. If not just barely.

      • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
        May 18, 2008
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        “TIM!” Samuel cried. “It’s me, Sam, remember!?” Tom didn’t, his eyes glowed a eerie bright green. Samuel quickly rolled to his side and crawled backwards out into his yard.

    • kierancluchey
      May 18, 2008
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      Thanks!

      Yes, I goofed when I called the two characters similar names. I'll look for where Tom and Tim mix, and I'll fix it, if I can find it. But changing the name this late would set off the other stories, but I think I'll bring in an extra little dynamic to the story in the next part, where the Narrator explains the connection between not only the names, but Tom, and Tim themselves. Thank you, I enjoyed you're comment.


  • C-r-a-z-y
    May 17, 2008
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    lol


  • G3ni.w3rn3r
    May 17, 2008

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    I loved it!!!!! omg was it tim plzzz finish soon i really want to see who that was. i loved it tho it was awsome i hope u get a good idea for what u write next

    • kierancluchey
      May 17, 2008
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      Thanks

      As soon as I get a good idea for the plot of part 4, I'll start to write it. Until then, I guess I'll write something else that I've been wanting to get off my mind. If not, then I'll just sit back till I get the idea.

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