Ok picture this.1
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Your about 16 or 17.3
Your at a cafe with some friends at night.4
Your talking about...the cute hottie two tables down 5
or that pretty shy girl he's talking to.6
she starts playing with her Blonde hair and smiling. 7
Her teeth are perfect and her skin as fine. 8
She has light blue eyes and shes wearing a black long sleeve9
And a pair of skinny jeans and some converses.10
The hottie as black hair and deep blue eyes.11
He is wearing a school uniform. A white long sleeve 12
a red tie black shoes. his leather jacket is hanging on 13
back of his chair. Hes talking about something but you cant hear.14
the lights go out and the whole place is pitch black.15
you feel something pick you up from your chair.16
You hear one of your friends scream.17
You feel something bite down on you neck and scream.18
pain races though your body and you go limb.19
next thing you know is you wake up in the middle of a street20
With a new life you don't even know about.21
a new life as a vampire.
Author notes
ok the way the spaceing is like that is becaus ei think it looks cool lol
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Whats the good, whats the bad?
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I LOVE your prologue! It's so interesting and exciting! I love where the story takes place!
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this good, a few spelling mistakes but who doesn't get them every once in a while, anyway, good work, keep it up
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Oooo, very interesting! I do believe it's called a 'blurb'. Anywho, this has really peaked my interest. Must. read. next. chapter.
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It's a great idea for a story! The spelling mistakes do take away from the story though.
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is this a blurb for a story then? if it is it's well written, but not what i asked for. i asked for a story or one part of a story, not a blurb. though i will most likely read the actual story.
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other than the font problem (which we've already talked about) this is a pretty cool storyline. i'll have to come back to read the others for sure.
WW
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i agree with the spacing. lol
i pretty much like this idea because it's like a combination of real life/ underworld life and u barely see that nowadays (ok, not really but i had to say it...^_^) -
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I just noticed something....I lef tit where my character could be the blonde girl.....and she coudl know the boy..hehe...lets see where this will go ^_^ im gonna have fun with this one.
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This is cool. I would so love to read more!!! just a couple of spelling mistakes, but other wise WOW!!!
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