10 words ~ Suicide 4 sale

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~Suicide is a contradiction of depression~ 3

Death please save me4

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  • WhatALovelyDay
    May 26, 2008

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    contradiction of depression... I keep hearing it described like that, but I don't get it Good job though ^_^

  • V l
    May 15, 2008
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    Short powerful and and raw. They don't understand but I do my little vampire queen.


  • asthray.heart
    May 15, 2008

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    You say suicide is a contradiction of depression. Then say Death please save me. It makes sense but im a little icky about this Blair.

    It has what it should. But there is something about using contradiction and the two themes you use. Just doesn't come together how it should.

    I liked the last line but.

    Tnks for entering babe and goodluck.

    ebunni


  • Hismercy
    May 15, 2008

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    That skull is to white to be mine......mine is too cheep

    On line 4 I was trying to play with the little amount that was given...I had to laugh

    Please save me death !

    What Rhonin said made semse, yet I had to read it carefully cause with a simple distraction, I got confused !

    Of the list of words that the judge gave you to explore, I am not suprised that you chose this one....

    Yet I am very suprised of how the creativity and the limited words were used for this one word that was given to be typed !



    -Hismercy

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Rhonin gold member
    May 14, 2008

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    i suppose that line makes sense. with suicide, the concept is the hope of painlessness. since depression is a sense of misery and hopelessness, then suicide, representing hope for the lack of a future, would not be a depressive action.

    however, the most effective and common way to reach the conclusion of suicide is through experiencing hopelessness, thus suicide is an act out of desperation and hopelessness. because of the multiple feelings one has while considering suicide, both hope and hopelessness, it makes sense that the consept would be a contradiction.

    in short, splendid job and wonderful wording, especially with "Death please save me". it really strikes a core.

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