when I was a little girl I always had watched my dad shave. well one day when I was three I was walking around the house(I was a very adventurous child) and saw his razor. I thought well if he can do that so can I so I picked up the razor and put it on my bottom lip and drug it across. I ended up shaving my bottom lip of that day and it bled for three hours but my parents couldn't take me to the E.R. because there wasn't anything they could do I couldn't get stitches because there was no skin to stitch it was horrible and probably my worst memory ever though I every time I talk about I laugh. it is funny now but that day was horrible then my great grandma died a couple days after that.
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this is all true I was three and my dad was so mad at himself and to this day I sill have a scar
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well yeah
just like flipflopinTM said, only that i would have used sweeter words
well, the story is funny, and don't worry! you will get better in writing the more you practice!
one good tip is to read.
reading all kind of things from different authors helps you see the writing styles. soon, you will find a writing style of your own, and the words will come out smooth and nicely without even trying.
reading is the key to writing.
i liked the story nevertheless, except that about your great grandma!
cheers anyways!
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I only have one thing to say to that I read about 20 + books a month and I don't mean little tiny kids books I read thick 400+ page books so I read but as a life story it will come out exactly how it happened I don't understand what you guys mean by depth or emotion if you want depth and emotion I will show a story I am working on now when I am done with it
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This could be a good start but it is jumbled and lacks the structure of a story it is more like a note you'd pass to a friend. It lacks emotion and depth.
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well I am new on here and this is a life story not one I made up the ones a I make up are way better but my life stories I tel how they are I don't add stuff to them but thanks for the coment
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You don't have to add stuff that isn't real. You can add stuff that still makes it real.
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