Ghost Puppy

We were walking through the woods. Just a normal day on a normal camping trip. We came out here to Battle Ground to get out of the city take some time and refresh our spirits. What we didn’t think we would find were other spirits coming to visit also.  We had been hiking up this hill for nearly an hour when we decided it was time to stop for lunch. We had a half hour to rest before we had to start again, we needed to make it to the top and back before night fall. As we sat down on a log and pulled out the peanut butter sandwiches we had made for lunch there was a stream right next to us which gave off some nice cool air. 1

“It is so beautiful out here.” I said turning to Jay2

“I don’t know about beautiful but have you been getting the feeling that someone is watching us, because I have all day” he looked over at me with questions in his eyes3

“I suppose I have but there is no one else out here at least I haven’t heard anyone following us.”4

Out of the corner of my eye I noticed something moving. I looked over to where the sound had come from and saw a dog standing there. He looked hungry, like someone had left him out here for days. 5

“Well look at that, your follower is nothing more then a lost dog.” I gave a weak laugh. “Come here boy” I said as I pulled a piece of sandwich away to give to the dog. 6

I watched as the dog started to walk forward. He was heading right towards a tree. Then all of a sudden he started to walk through the tree then disappeared into thin air. 7

“What the hell? Where did that dog go?” I jumped up from the log and looked around. “Tell me you saw that dog disappear into thin air?”  I stared at Jay before realizing he was just as confused as I was. 8

“I dunno what exactly just happened but what do you say we get moving we need to get back before dark anyways” 9

“Yea alright” I got up a little disappointed and followed him up the hill it was about another two hour hike before we would reach the top. With frequent breaks to stop and look around at the scenery it took us three hours to get to the top. What we saw when we got there was breath taking.  Just beyond the peek of the hill was a beautiful lake and with a cascading water fall. The water looked like millions of diamonds sparkling in the sun. I saw something moving again out of the corner of my eye. Thinking the mysterious dog was back I turned around to look. To my surprise it was a girl, only this was not a normal girl she was floating just above the ground, abnormally pasty with what looked like darker stains on her night dress. Could that be blood? I thought to myself. Strangely she gave off the same type of look as our little follower did earlier. I didn’t notice it then but now that I think about it, I could see through that dog just like I can see through this girl. I soon realized that this was no girl; this was the spirit of a girl, a ghost. My heart dropped into my stomach as this realization hit me. 10

“Jay…. Look… there…. “I grabbed Jays arm spinning him around slowly.11

Jay’s mouth dropped as the girl moved closer to us… she was saying something or rather mouthing something, but I couldn’t make out exactly what.  She raised a butcher knife from behind her back and came charging at us. I screamed as Jay grabbed me pulling me behind him. I stumbled before catching my feet and we ran like hell down the side of the mountain. Suddenly I heard a bark, I turned to look. 12

“Jay, look at that” 13

“Holy shit that’s the dog from earlier. It’s stopping the girl.” His jaw dropped open in disbelief. 14

We watched in amazement as the dog attacked the girl. Barking and growling at her, she turned and vanished just as fast as she came.  What surprised us most was this was no large dog; it was about the size of a beagle maybe. Then it hit me, maybe this dog used to be the girl’s dog. What had happened to them though? I made a mental note to do some research about accidents in this area when I got home.  15

“Thank you boy” I said as I kneeled down to the dog. 16

The dog nodded as if he understood what I was saying, but he refused to come any closer, so I stood up and looked at Jay. We turned to walk back down the hill but we could hear our ghost puppy following us the whole way down. We knew he was keeping an eye out for us. 17

We returned to this camping spot many times after this incident. The ghost puppy, who we now call Nero, always shows up to watch out for us. Though we never did see the girl again, but who knows what could have happen if Nero wasn’t there for us. 18

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  • Diamond2007
    July 5, 2005
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    I am glad you liked the storie, it's undergoing a lot of changes, though keep in mind this is no where near the full storie, just as soon as I can get around to it. I have much going on. Anyways thanks for your comment and I will be returning the favor just as soon as I can.

  • neurossection
    July 4, 2005
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    I love ghost stories like this ... so sad, but beautiful, to think that they're still watching out for us and sometimes they reach out to us. Loved the story!

    ~Laura

  • GhostPrincess
    February 5, 2005
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    I loved this story, left me with questions thought. Where did the dog and girl come from? Was there anything written up in the paper about them? I need more, this was good. I have just started reading some of your stuff including your bio page. I love it. I have added you to my favorites. I can't wait to read more of you work. I just love this. (Tina)

  • klassy lassy
    January 24, 2005
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    Good

    Very imaginative write. This held my attention all the way through. You could expand this by developing the characters and situation of the ghost girl and the dog, their reasons for haunting the mountain, etc. There are still some rough edges with grammar and unnecessary wording in places, but overall I liked it and think it has potential for additional plot and adventure.


  • TheMechanicalAngel
    January 17, 2005
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    awesome

    awesomeness!!!!!!!!!!!!!this was great and detailed and imaginative and wow!(yeah i drank too much coffee today)

  • pattyann4500
    January 17, 2005
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    This is a really good story. Eerie! You are, indeed an excellent writer.

    By the way, I'm glad to see you back. I haven't seen you for awhile. Hugs, Patricia


  • January 17, 2005
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    Cool story. I like the name. Eerie stuff, even the idea that the nature of the dog and girl are still unknown.
    Also nice to see "man's best friend" span the dimensions ..
    Good work. B

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