The One

I was the one that messed up1

I was the one that said those hurtful things2

I was the one who stopped caring about anyone or anything3

I was the one who did stupid things4

I was the one who drank and had random flings5

I was the one who wanted to die6

I was the one who would cry and cry 7

I was the one that couldn’t say sorry because I was ashamed8

I was the one who didn’t want to take the blame9

I was the one who couldn’t ignore those nasty glares10

I was the one who thought I should die and no one would care11

I was the one who finally hit rock bottom12

I was the one who broke down and told everything to my mom13

I was the one who asked for help14

I was the one that tried very hard to change my ways15

I was the one that finally made it through this faze 16

I am the one who now knows who I am17

I am the one who know where I stand18

I am the one who prays to God every night19

I am the one who thanks him for helping me through this nasty fight20

I am the one that some people may never forgive21

I am the one who will never forget what I did-22

-as long as I shall live

Author notes

I hope you like my poem. I wrote it after I stayed a week in the hospital. I tried to commit suicide because of my mistakes and my depression. I am so much stronger now.

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  • Hismercy
    May 12, 2008

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    I've stayed in the hospital for two weeks last Feb., yet for a totally different reason...I never thought of writing, right when I was out !

    I personally love what was written !



    -Hismercy

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Kylia Skydancer Greeters member
    May 12, 2008

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    Hey, I noticed you had two copies of this poem. To delete one of the copies, click it and, when it opens, click the "Edit" link in the right-hand column. Then click "Delete" on the Edit page, near the top of the right-hand column.

    hope that helps!


  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    May 12, 2008

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    Reality stories scare me and lyrical writing is not one of my best points . I don’t know what to say. When I’m at a loss for words the impossible has happened .

    You have a gift for language and use your words wisely, so the ideas are not hidden .

    A bit of editing is required (we all need that). Watch for synonyms like phase and faze.

    Welcome to SW I’m certain you will find some great groups here that can help with your writing. Any questions just ask.


  • tallblondie gold member
    May 12, 2008

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    Baring your soul to everyone can be hard - especially after going through such an event. Thank you for sharing. One tiny spelling mistake on line[16] 'phase' not 'faze'.

    Keep smiling - and welcome to Storywrite!


  • Dreams of Insanity
    May 12, 2008
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    Do you think you could tell me which prompt you used? Please and thank you.

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