I groaned. Oh Jesus. Hangovers suck. I looked around my apartment ... my blurry eyes slowly beginning to focus. I stumbled over to a figure lying half naked on the floor. I rolled her over with a grunt and saw blood slowly drying, matted on her scalp, where a jagged gash was dark against her pale skin. Pale lifeless eyes looked at me as I felt bile rising in my throat.1
Who was this girl? And more importantly what was she doing dead, lying on the floor of my apartment? The world started to swim around me as I stumbled to the toilet, retching before I could get into the door, vomit spattering on the floor. I wiped my mouth as I straightened and tried to clear my thoughts. Right, I got wasted last night and now there is a dead girl on my floor, bleeding into the carpet. Now I just-2
The fall came quickly, as did the blinding pain of my head hitting the corner of the vanity, splitting my head open. Blood was everywhere, red and metallic, clogging my nostrils…3
The child sat bolt upright in his bed, sweat pouring down his skin, making his pyjamas stick to his skin. He gasped for breath as he struggled to regain his normal breathing patterns.4
In, out, in, out…5
He climbed out of his bed and went over to the window, where pale moonlight is leaking through the curtains. He tugged open the curtains and stared blankly out onto the dark street. In the dream… he had caught a glimpse of the face in the mirror as he fell.6
It was his own face. 7
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wow....
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Very intriguing concept. I agree with Blaze below. We may need a little bit more detail to convey the full horror.
I like how, in the start, he's too hungover to realize the significance of the dead body. xD Nice touch.
Also, I love how you end this. A bit abrupt, but very good.
-HT
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Hmm very interesting. I think you should give us more. lol. It's that interesting. If there is anymore tell me. I like the way you wrote it. By accident I read the last line and when i was readign the whole thing I was like wth of course he's going to see his own face it's his reflection. But then i read the sentence before that and I was like ooooooh. I get it now lol. Keep up the good work!
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Very mysterious. Cool write!
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thank u for the comment!
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koooooool
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thank u!
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welldone i love it AYYAYAYYAYAYYA!!!!!!!! -
wow!!!
This was deep and had me very emotional! I read it over three times cuz I enjoyed it so much!~ There is a mysterious aura about it that I LOVE! The descriptions of the wound and how the person felt were so realistic! Great job!
-Lissy
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thank you for that comment! i appreciate it!
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o.o i loved this! Very , very good write. Every bit of it ws great!
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thank you! i will try to write more soon!
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Bravo!
This was entertaining all the way through. I enjoyed it...twice Well written with good descriptions. True talent. Well Done!!
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