Mom, I love you

Mother dearest,1

You have pretty eyes2

Your hands work hard3

You gave me life, 4

care, shelter, food 5

joy, freedom, pity, luck,6

smiles, things, and help7

You were with me when I cried8

You embraced and soothed me when I was sad 9

You gave me a good education10

Freinds who are not bad influences11

You are indulgent12

giving me everything I want 13

With your love14

But now it's time to give you the only thing I can give15

Love16

I love you Mom 17

Please hug me18

Forgive me for being greedy19

For making you work hard 20

For worrying you 21

Let's cry together22

Hug me23

You are my treasure24

My only Mom25

You had to carry me for nine months26

Let's hug for nine minutes27

Thank you for everything you do28

Happy Mother's Day, Mom29

I'll give you the love you gave me all along30

Hug me, Mom 31

Happy Mother's Day.....32

Let's smile, not cry33

All day34

TOGETHER35

Hug me, Mom36

I love you37

Author notes

i love my mom. i don't know what to give her on mother's day. i'll surely give her love.....

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  • Starlight-Kisses
    May 12, 2008

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    aww this was so sweet for your mom you should give it to her well done I loved it very emotional and powerful it really is great and I can't say much more than....wow this was great


    • NinjaMegami
      May 12, 2008
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      aw...

      all these sweet comments..... thank YOU guys! for commenting me!


  • Asfand
    May 10, 2008

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    Awwww, this was so sweet. It's easy to understand it really comes from the heart - you should read this to her! I suppose she'll love it lots.

    Really emotional and powerful!


    • NinjaMegami
      May 12, 2008
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      tahnk you!

      thank you so much! i really did put effort in it!!!!!


  • Spiffy Ree
    May 10, 2008
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    This was a very good poem and entry! Good luck! =D


    • NinjaMegami
      May 10, 2008
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      thx

      thanks! i really did try on this one! i made it just for this contest!


  • Hismercy
    May 10, 2008

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    pass the tissue box...the pink box



    This was very very beautiful and touching !

    truly from the heart !

    Thank you SOOOOOO much for posting this on this contest !

    -Hismercy

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • NinjaMegami
      May 10, 2008
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      awwww.....

      thank YOU for commenting. it really took a while to write. the poems that don't ryhme have more emotion sometimes. i wanted to too, @ first!!!!!


    • NinjaMegami
      May 10, 2008
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      thanks

      i tried to put emotion in it. my poems are usually not this long. how did you make those crying faces??


  • NinjaMegami
    May 10, 2008
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    hmmm.....

    i hope it's ok.....

    • Hismercy
      May 10, 2008
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      to make those crying faces

      to make the crying face make the eyes : and then use two sad mouths with no spaces (( and you put the eyes and the two sad mouths together and you get

      I can see that this poem took time to write...you know when you read those exhausting long stories yet sometimes it takes us a while to read, or sometimes fast....yet for those who took the effort to post those long stories...now they have the patience and time to write !


      • NinjaMegami
        May 10, 2008
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        oh...

        i think in a poem the hardest thing is the choice of words.....

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