Not to Be

We were best friends,
We shared our dreams,
We promised each other our lives.
So when did it come to this?
Why did it come to this?
Was it in just one day we grew up?
And the gazes were no longer friendly,
The touches no longer playful.
We crossed the line and lost our minds.
Were we in a dream?
Out of fear, out of dread,
We were torn apart,
We were forced awake,
For we were not to be.1

The sands of time runs,
I walked away from my past,
Away from the hurt and pain.
I found myself an anchor,
A man who loves me.
Then out of my past,
My forgotten past,
You appeared.
You brought with you our dreams,
You brought with you our past,
Reveries of might-have-beens,
Nightmares of broken promises.
But you were too late,
And we were not to be.2

Yet now I lie here beside you,
Dreaming of days gone by;
Two young children on swings,
Innocent, best of friends;
Two young people sharing a kiss,
Under the magnolia tree;
Two dark silhouette in bed,
Dark passion under the sheets.
We were best of friends,
We were lovers,
We were lost,
We were delirious,
We were in love,
But we were not to be.3

When morning breaks,
I cry tears of shame and guilt,
Tears of broken promises.
I have crossed the street,
I no longer deserved you,
I am sorry, forgive me.
As you walk away,
Please believe me,
Believe the pain, the agony;
Believe that I will never love anybody,
The way I loved you;
Believe that I will always remember,
The two girls that we were,
Who were not to be.

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  • MJs-Angel
    May 25
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    This was very well-written and almost did make me cry. Your words flowed smoothly and I'm happy to see you won trophies in three of your entered contests! Great job for that! This poem is great...the lines mean three different things...do you get what I mean?" I don't have reccomendations for this piece.

    loney-angel


  • Raining.Fire
    May 5

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    Awwwwwwwww! That was soooooo sad. A very enjoyable read, though. And, very well written! Overall, you did a wonderful job on this!


  • reilly500
    April 30

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    Wonderful. The words were passionate, strong, emotional. The word are very shaking and that twist ending was the cherry on top.


  • Cajun.Lullaby
    March 8
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    WOW, wow. . .and did I mention WOW?!

    This is an awesome write, absolutely amazing. The story is so bittersweet and yet the emotions are raw, real, and compelling. The reader feels them as clearly as the narrator.

    The ending took me completely by surprise. Beautifully cast! Keep up the great work!


  • lenore2010
    March 4

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    I really like this poem. It was written both emotionally and simply, which I really like. Oh, it had such an excellent excellent ending, I wasn’t expecting that at all. I just love the twist. This was such a sad write. Good luck!!


  • ShadowKat
    December 4, 2008
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    Your poem will connect to many, I hope you get a good rating. I love your poem!!


  • Rain4Life
    November 23, 2008

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    I read it about 3 times to endure how WONDERFUL it was! You are SO in the running for winning this contest!
    ♥Rain♥


    • LuciferLight
      November 24, 2008
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      Thank you thank you...
      But I took out of the contest because its more than 30 lines... if you don't mind, I can put it back again...


  • GossipGirlLuvR
    August 9, 2008

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    I LOVE this. It has a great ending! I love the words and the emotion in it! You are a great writer. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.


  • Frozen Angel
    August 5, 2008

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    I love this one. It is so bittersweet and I think you captured emotions wonderfully.

    Thank you and good luck in my contest.

    *Frozen Angel*


  • Vampire MnMs
    June 20, 2008
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    Wonderful

    This had what I was looking for. Good luck in your writing and continue on. I hope you do well


  • Veritaserum
    May 10, 2008
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    You got me...

    ...with that twist ending! Wasn't expecting that at all...not by a long shot! LOL.

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