My sweet sweet boy, my lover oh so true. I melt everytime I see you, my face sweats with excitement, my palms turn hot. I get a feeling in the pit of my stomach that I can't explain. But, do you have to love her? Do you have to give her all your feelings? Please, please boy, I want to be near you always and forever. Don't leave me in the dust, behind you forever, crying in my own tears, longing for you to be in my arms. I love you, oh so much, please please don't leave yet, just hold me in your arms and kiss me and tell me how much you love me, please. I love you.
A contest entry
- Unloved love by NinjaMegami.
100 points, ended May 12, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Romantica 3# (Third attempt at a Romance contest) by Intrepid.
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INTERSTING PIECE :
flash fiction or flash reality
I am not sure it read much like prose in a matter of words and was emotionally equipt to the standards I was after
well done
thanks for entering
good luck
Blair
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So much searing passion. to love someone that much and never feel it in return. I liked the poem. Your pain shows through well.
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Your talking about Jack aren't you Lily?
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Yes
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wait!
lil, i thought you were going to write something else!!!!!
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wow i liked it.. it depicted the love between most young people these days, where one loves but the other does not.
good job and im looking forward to reading more of your writing! -
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