He's sitting right next to me. The closest person in the room, full of pubescent teens and my friends. I was one of these teens. And I wanted something so bad, the need burned at my throat and my heart, every fiber of my being. And he wasn't aware of it. He never would be. He was out of my league.1
But, I knew, I would never be able to act normal around him again. Not since a month ago, when I realized my feelings, in this very room. The only class I had with him.2
I'd realized, when he kept, just creeping into my mind. His face. His voice. His handwriting. And he had no idea, that he was loved with every fiber of my body.3
So attuned to where her was, and mesmerized by him. I had watched him, before I even knew it. I had never fully known it, I don't think. Watching him run around the soccer field, and the classroom before the bell rang, and the teacher came in. 4
He didn't realize how much I need him. And that was a good thing. I knew it with every fiber, because he would never love me back.
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Enjoyed it.
This story is actually kind of sad for me. I feel sorry for the character and wish that she would just give it a shot. If he shoots her down, then it's his loss. Never been any harm in trying right? It's full of sad emotion and thoughtful descriptions. I enjoyed reading it so thank you!
Some grammar stuff...
1st sentence in Para three doesn't really flow well...fragment? Para four sentence one...should 'her' be something else? Perhaps 'she'?
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what class do you have with him? i know who this is about!
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aww that was so sad and yet it was really deep i like it keep up the good work this is a really good short story keep it up
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This was sweet, but there are a few spelling mistakes. I love the deep emotion.
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awww this is sad
But so I have felt this way about girls before.. not so much boys ... but I felt the connection
more ...I like this
flask fiction kinda XD
keep it up
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