Diana managed to slip into a world where dragons ran rampant among the inner workings of her mind and there she found momentary sanctuary, her dragons came upon the problem which throbbed in her mind like a sour thumb. The dragons began to breath fire onto it and as the problem melted away into her conscious mind trickled ideas and solutions to the problem. A noise stirred her from her dream, it was a beautiful sound, she recognized it as singing, the dragons in her mind melted away a whole new layer from the problem and Diana walked steadily towards the door from which the sounds were coming. The singing was soft and light, they way she had imagined a siren of the Odyssey sounded. She stopped, there were about five doors that arrayed the alleyway, she slowly listened to see which door the sound was coming from. She slowly pushed open the door and looked inside; the small dingy room was full of men most of whom were in a drunken stupor, the rest were watching a young looking girl twirl herself about the tables and make a grand show of her body, it was this girl’s voice which had drawn Diana in. Some of the men sang along to the song, she smiled as she swung her hips widely and teased them with her body’s motion. 1
Something in the girl's smile comforted Diana so much that her impulse to shut the door and hide was overcome. Diana looked at the girl and thought she was beautiful; she was a gnat, that much was obvious by the freckles which speckled her otherwise peach skin, but she was more beautiful then any of Diana’s kind she had ever seen. Diana wasn’t exactly sure what it was which made the girl look beautiful, maybe it was just because she had never seen a gnat before and the difference appeared beautiful to her. The girl was wider then Diana but not by any means fat. Her breasts were large compared to Diana’s but a nice size in comparison with the girl’s wider body, not being too big the way Casey’s were, but not being so small as to look childishly under developed.. Under her breasts her body curved sharply inward before flaring out dramatically at her exceptionally wide hips. Her hair was long wavy and a chestnut brown, her face was hart shaped and not entirely symmetrical, which was something new to Diana who was accustomed to seeing every girl and guy with more or less the same facial features and all being perfectly symmetrical. 2
The girl looked right at Diana and smiled warmly, Diana knew she would have to introduce herself and she sat thinking of the best way to do so, she knew that her given name could not be used because it was too commonly used by those who were rich and she would be hated for so much as having a rich sounding name. Diana’s mind reeled and she found the perfect name, Hel, most gnats (in a blatant display against the capital religion) would named there children after fictional or mythical characters, so as to let other gnat’s know a little bit about the child. Hel would have been a perfect name for a child who was born looking the way she did now, Hel was the goddess of the Norse version of hell, she was the daughter of Loki, it was said of her that half her body appeared as a rotting corpse and the other half of a beautiful woman. The name Hel would have been the easiest choice for a gnat mother giving birth to such an ugly child.3
The girl’s song finished playing and she sat down at the end of one of the tables and beckoned Diana over. The girl had a youthful and happy face, she smiled as Diana approached. She patted the spot on the table next to her in a warm and inviting way. “Are you new to these parts?” She asked in a cheerful tone. “Yea, I’m still trying to find my way around.” Diana answered knowing that she looked confused enough to be suspicious if she answered other wise, within that second her brain clicked and she had an entire background story which would explain everything but revile nothing which could get her in to trouble.4
“I’m Allure” she said in a friendly tone. “Were you from?” Diana paused for a few seconds before answering, “Philadelphia, I used to be a house servant for a rich family.” Allure nodded, it was a plausible answer and it explained her slightly rich accent. “So what brings you here?” Allure asked. In answer, Diana attempted to look ashamed; she had to for the story to work. “I got kicked out, the boy I took care of since I was three wanted me to become his mistress and I refused, he then told his father that I was intentionally breaking things so he would lose money and I was kicked out.” It was believable so far, gnats and the poorer or the Sups heard horror stories worse then that on a daily basis. Allure continued to smile sweetly, Diana wanted to tell her everything, what really happened and glean to the sympathy that Allure was showing towards the character Diana had created for her. “What’s your name?” Allure suddenly asked. Diana stopped cold; she had nearly forgotten the name she had picked out for herself. “Glitch!” Allure teasingly called, “what?” “Oh, it’s a name you call someone if they can’t remember simple things, because they have a glitch.” Diana smiled wryly and said, “I know my name, I just kind of blanked, I’m Hel.” Allure met the name with a knowing smile, “Your father is also your master, am I correct?” Diana nodded, she hadn’t thought that far ahead but it made sense, a lot of freaky things happened to children who were the product of male Sups and female gnats. The half and half construction of her face could easily be explained if the statement Allure proposed were true.5
"So what are you REALLY doing here?" Allure asked with a glance that told Diana that Allure knew she was lying. "I can't tell you, not now." Diana whispered then looked about the room of drunken men so as to indicate the reason for her silence. Allure nodded well at least I know what you will tell me will be true, I only caught your lie because you were too quick to agree with me, had those things really happened to you, you wouldn't be telling me here." With a nod of her head she gestured at the drunken man who was asleep under the table where they sat and conversed. Diana earnestly wanted to spill out her soul to the girl who now looked solemnly into her eyes. "You don't have to worried too much about the though, I gave them all sleeping pills in their alcohol, they shouldn't be awake for to much longer. She winked and got up on the table, another song began to play out loud enough to drown the drunken voices and Allure danced for the men who were being hypnotized to sleep by the drugs and Allure's ever swinging body.6
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Wow...
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I was trying to explaine dreams... i guess it takes a while to grasp that but sometimes when i wake up it takes ME a while to grasp that ihad been dreaming...
Like i said in the Paragraph where Diana was picking a cover name, in the nat culture you are named for your charatiristics
sorry, it fits better in teh tellers mind... so if there is anything which confuses you please let me know!
oh and thank you for pointing out my mistake
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outstanding
This episode did start sort of suddenly with the dragons image from the dreams Diana was having, but I eventually fitured it out. Interesting choice of names for the girl that uses her body to attract all of the drinking men. There's a reason she gave them all sleeping pills... i just haven't figured it out yet. she's either trying to protect herself, or she's robbing them. I'm sure I'll find out soon enough. Wonderful plot line, keep it going! There's one spot where beginning quotations are missing. When Allure says, "Well, at least i know what you will tell me will be true, i only caught your lie..." in the last paragraph. I had to read it through twice to get what was going on. Other than that, no blaring errors jumped out at me.
God bless.
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Dude, seriously, each installment makes me feel like I've missed a *Shitload* of plotlines, but the characters are supposed to be exactly the same...It just doesn't make sense..
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wow! this is so cool! I love this story! keep writing!
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