Love is frail,
Love is breakable,
Like glass.
If you drop it,
It will break.1
Mending a broken heart takes a long time,
Like fixing a broken mirror.
You need every single peace,
To make it whole again.
Was it good?
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Aww that was cute. I liked it.
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short but strait to the point.Good job i liked it, and it has everything in it to explain what you mean.great job on it though!
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Unless it's a play-on word, 'peace' should be 'piece.' Overall, I liked the simplicity in this piece. It was very meaningful for a very short piece. Very good, keep writing. ^^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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So true...I aboslutely loved it...
You have a great talent for writing poetry, apprently, much better than my own skills.
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Honest poem about love. Good sentences. Nice...
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Hmmm. Short and a nice shape... I like how the sentences match up well.. You reuse the words break and broken though... maybe you meant to have that poem repetition, but since you only use them twice, maybe you could use a synonym instead. ^^ Like.. Love is Frail, Love is fragile.. which also sounds nice I think
Also, I think you meant 'piece' =o
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Very True! Never thought of it that way, but you have put it in perspective for me. Again, i say very well expressed...emotional undertone is nice.
~D
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aww this poem is so true
but rly good lol
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Cool!
Another good poem. Keep up the good work!
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awww!!! how great!!!
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WOW real nice i really like tis one
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It was good.
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