Dear Bella,1
I know you must miss me, but it's nice here. I think you'd like it. The trees are always green and the flowers are always in bloom. It smells really good here; like lilies. It kind of reminds me of the way your hair always smelled on a sunny day.2
I found a really nice oak tree in the park the other day. The parks here are prettier than the ones back home. I guess everything here is like that. It's sort of boring.3
Everything here is a little too peaceful and serene. I always did like noise. Remember how loud I always played my music? The neighbors always complained. There's no loud music in heaven. It makes me kind of sad.4
I'm actually starting to like it here. There aren't any tests to study for or assignments to do. Heaven's really relaxing. I guess the lack of stress is nice.5
As truly amazing as this place seems, there's something missing. Beyond the noise, stress, and overall chaos that went with life, was you. You made everything better.6
You know that park I mentioned earlier? I want to cry everytime I see it. We had our first date under the big oak tree in the park behind my house. I kissed you for the very first time that day.7
Honestly, I miss you. Heaven has everything but you. I wanted more time. We were going to get married and start a family. Did you know I was going to propose to you at graduation?8
This breathtaking place holds everything but my heart. I mean, I'll adjust eventually, but I really miss you. I can watch, but I can't touch. My bodies dead, but my heart and soul are not. They still yearn for you every minute of the day.9
I do want you to be happy, though. As badly as I want to be with you again, I don't want you to come here just yet. I saw you considering it the other day. Please, not yet. You still have your life. I'm begging you not to do it. I know you miss me and I miss you, but I want you to live. Do it for me.10
These perfect parks and snow white halls aren't where you belong. All I want is for you to be happy again. I want to see you agian, but I can wait. I'll wait until it's your time. Until then, live your life as you would had I never died. Laugh and smile like you used to. Remember, I will always love you.11
Never forget me,12
Soshi 13
Author notes
Soshi is a fictional character.
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Wow. Loving, descriptive. Painful, in a sense. I nearly teared up a bit when he said it wasn't her time. That was some powerful stuff there. This was a lovely letter and I only found one or two VERY minor errors in grammar/spelling. Thanks so much for your entry! Good luck!
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It's as though Soshi is Bella's guardian angel, and not being on earth is hard but that's true love. That's a refreshing outlook on something as tragic as losing the love of your life. Even as unhappy as the character is with his surroundings he still looks out for the girl he loves.
Keep up the great writing and good luck
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Wow that is so good! Very emotional and poetic. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Wow, i loved this! I really liked how you used imagery to describe heaven but also took into account the sadness that someone would feel at being there, especially as the character still sounded so young to be taken from earth. I'm so glad you told Bella to hang on and that Soshi would wait for her. A really god job!
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Oh gosh. This is just so beautiful! It's sad, but in a sweet way. I can sorta relate to the part about missing someone so much that you want to be with them, even it it means dying. I'm glad Soshi encouraged Bella to hold on. Even when we think there's nothing left for us on earth, if we hang in there long enough, it eventually is possible to keep on going and even be happy again. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful, touching story, moonwriter.
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Wow,this is beautifully depressing Good luck in the contests. You probably don't need it, lol.
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This was beautiful. I think you'll do wonderfully in the contest. Actually, I'm sure of it.
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