Cherished Time1
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Time is a hated thing for me
Constantly moving going forward
Erasing days from my memories
Because everything stays the same and the clock still ticks3
When I found you
The clock stopped
Time had no meaning for me
And I was finally free4
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Time has such a stranglehold over my life
How long until the next minute, hour, and year?
Always going to the next thing or place
But when I met you, you dazzled me with your smile
Made my heart race with your kiss
And nothing existed outside of us
I didn't want to ever leave6
When time resumed and we break away
I count the minutes until we can be together again
Every day that we don't have together makes me a little crazy
But the torturous wait is well worth it when I can hold you again7
You shake my world up
and make everything come to life
where before everything was gray and dull
You make every moment with you glorious and fun-filled.
I cherish you and every moment spent with you
And I will gladly do anything to continue our cherished time.8
Author notes
I tried to make a love poem, and while I usually go with smoky and sensual... I thought to try a different approach. If it sucks, tell me and I will keep to what I know.
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- Love Poems by Crying Angel Eyes.
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Nope, doesn't suck at all! This is a great piece full of heartfelt and beautiful emotion. Wasn't overly done and flowed very well
I love reading poetry like this. I absolutely adored the second and fourth stanza!
Beautiful words-job well done
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I can tell you one thing for sure - this poem does NOT suck! In fact, it's quite the opposite! I love when you write like this. It's mooshie, without dripping moosh, you know? Then again, I like dripping moosh, too. *lol* I don't know about the girl you wrote this about, but I would love it if someone felt this way about me, and had the poetic hand to put it to paper. you're just about every girls dream come true. Keep up the great work!
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Love is an open meadow. Everything pure connects to it. What you write when you write sensual and 'smoky', you are still connected to love in its most simplist form. To cut to the chase, I think this was fantastic. Really beautiful. Much enjoyed.
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I really relate to this and it hit a string... i love this so much.... thank you
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well I will admit u are smoking with the sensuality... But If I am correct; In which I think I am. This was aimed at one heart, and i can tell you right now that heart is beating, beating with love
blissful in the mind of your lover
Blair
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