In Hell I stay every single day1
Crying black tears showing wounds cut so deep2
No one' understands no one cares3
Forced to act like nothings wrong4
When really everythings wrong with this pethetic nothing I call my life5
Coming home to a broken household6
Dads a drunk 7
Mom never there for she can't bare the pain8
No way out to kill myself would give me no pleasure for to kill sentences you to were I am now hell so says the bible9
But maybe god will understand if I kill myself its to get away from this waste land I call hell!!
Author notes
Hey I am trying to get the hang of this poem thing I have a lot of the thoughts but to be honest no way how to write it so tell me what you think give me some pointers
what do you think of my poem
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that was really good. nice job.
keep trying.
your getting somewhere. ;]
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i think it was really good
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Cha Cha Cha Chino! That was amazing...the structure was better and the emotion really flowed and florished... It was utterly amazing ♥
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This one is better than the rest i saw. You improved more,good job. The form you have it in is better and easier to read.You are better at showing the emotion in it. it is good the way it is, but that is just me. Other people might say other things , but i really liked this poem you made.
i just wanted to put that.
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