'I'm sick of this!' I yelled out into the empty house, hoping he would be able to hear from outside.2
'You know, you're gonna end up in prison if you keep doing this!'3
Still no reply. I sighed and continued my way to the phone at the other side of the lounge room. 4
'Shit!' I cursed as I stubbed my toe on a chair. I thought about turning the lights on, but then that pervert would have the satisfaction of seeing me in my nightgown. I finally made it to the phone. 'I should really put the police on speed dial!' I thought to myself as I pulled my old vintage phone off the hook. I quickly dialed and held the plastic up to my ear. Nothing... 5
'Fuck, of all the times for the phone to die out!' I was about to start the futile search for my cell phone, until I heard something. It was pitch black so I couldn't see a thing.6
'Hello?' I called out.7
Nothing.8
I turned slowly around and tried to feel for something heavy to crack the intruder of the head with. Instead of finding a weapon though I found him. He covered my mouth and nose with something. I tried to scream but the cloth over my mouth silenced me. I tried to struggle but I was getting so drowsy and my body went limp. My eyes slowly started to shut and I was too tired to stop them.9
I began to shiver. I must've been outside because I could hear the rustle of trees and the crashing of waves. Where the hell was I? I opened my eyes, but it made no difference. The son of a bitch had put a blind fold on me. My wrists and ankles were bound. I began to pull at them to try and get my hands free but all that did was make them sore from the rope rubbing against my bare skin. I heard footsteps heading towards me. My blindfold was taken off to reveal my surroundings.10
We were in some form of forest opening. I looked around to see where the ocean was. We were near a cliff. This made me panic. 11
'What do you want from me?' I screamed, I could feel warm tears starting to fall down my cheeks. 12
'I'm doing this for us,' he replied.13
'What are you talking about? I don't know you!' He started to walk closer towards me. I tried to scuffle away but my body was still weak from whatever he had drugged me with. 14
'Please stop trying to deny our connection!' He pleaded as he captured me. He was a great deal taller and stronger than I was. I tried to bite him but he just turned my bites into kisses.15
'Don't fight it,' he whispered as we edged closer to the cliff.16
'Please no, I'll do anything, please!' I didn't take this stalker seriously. It was just some weird peeping tom.17
He placed me gently down on the grass. We were only four meters or so away from the edge of the cliff.18
'I have been very patient with you missy, every time I saw you with other men I ignored it and every time you tried to send me away I just thought you were playing,' He knelt down beside me and began to stroke my hair. I bit down hard on his. I could taste his blood in my mouth. 19
'Bitch!' he yelled and slapped me, 'After all the things I've done for you!'20
'I don't know you,' I pleaded 'Let me go you asshole!'21
He began to cry. 22
'We have to leave this world behind, it's the only way we can stay together!'23
At these words I knew what he planned on doing to me. I screamed and began to kick at him madly. 24
'Don't be scared,' he whispered as he hoisted me onto his shoulder, 'We will be accepted in the afterlife.'25
My body had gone numb and everything seemed to be going in slow motion. I saw his foot dangling over the edge of the cliff, it was only a matter of time before he took that final step. I felt myself slipping through the air. I could feel his strong arms still clutching my waist. Then I felt the icy water surround me. 26
I tried to swim to the surface but his corpse pulled me down. His eyes were still wide open even though he had breathed his final breath. It was like he wanted to see me drown along beside him. I kicked the body away and swam to the ocean's surface. I made my way to the shore. 27
I heard the sirens coming towards the ocean shore. Someone heard my screaming pleas. 28
I still remember that day. The events play vividly in my dreams. One minute it was a peeping tom, the next a hallucinating maniac with suicide and me on his mind. I wasn't told till later that he was actually a cleaner at my work place. I walk along the dock which is only a kilometer away from where he died. That morning came so fast and left as quickly as the tide.
Author notes
Saw You Drown - Katatonia
Er this story is a little weird. I wanted it to have lots of lose ends and stuff so people would be left saying 'wtf?'. I don't actually know why the song made me think of that, but anyway I wrote it so have fun.
A contest entry
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510 points, ended July 2, 2008, 21 entries
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Well I think it's bad, what do you think?
Comments
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It was a bit weird, but not bad at all, it's actually quite good, and I would love it if you expanded upon this idea, and perhaps explained a bit more who this guy was and why he was doing what he was, I would also like to know how many times he had come to her door before and such... But all in all, I liked this =)
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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It was a bit weird, but not bad at all, it's actually quite good, and I would love it if you expanded upon this idea, and perhaps explained a bit more who this guy was and why he was doing what he was, I would also like to know how many times he had come to her door before and such... But all in all, I liked this =)
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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That man defiles the name tom, he deserved to die, even though it was just a term. You write so vividly, and you managed to leave the word spine out, which is orsm. More =D



