That my dearest is when I feel most alive

♥Dear Emilia Faint-heart ♥
~♥~
As we journey through the times
Experience I have grown inside
Learning from you has been such a blissful time
My dearest Emilia
Wishing upon the star
I wish to feel myself closer to you
To give you the experience that we crave
Those words you speak about me
The ones I whisper back to you
Crying as your begging
Dreaming as You thrust yourself into the abyss
This travesty of tainted affections
So pure in my heart
When I'm choking on words you'll never say
And you'll never feel the same.
That my dearest is when I feel most alive
~♥~
 

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  • Hermanator1 silver member
    June 20, 2008

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    Pretty good

    When I'm choking on words you'll never say
    And you'll never feel the same.
    That my dearest is when I feel most alive

    liked that stanza. It seems to capture the emotion for the entire piece and would have been good as a stand alone work.

    beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • C-r-a-z-y
    May 4, 2008
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    yay! green!!!!


  • Crying Angel Eyes
    May 4, 2008

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    WoW i really liike this... good luck its too early in the contest to tell how well your doing but it looks bright... it got to me becasue my spanish name is Emilia... You must have posted this as soon as you saw my contest because as soon as i hit "submit contest" it said i had an entry i was like jeez. that was quick,

  • Mreynolds058
    May 4, 2008

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    I liked this, it was really passionately written and the love is evident throughout. It has a nice rythm and the repetition helps to make the whole thing come alive. In short, I like it very very much


  • DuchessAura of Brie silver member
    May 4, 2008

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    This is exactly what I was looking for =) Although you didnt put what lines you used in your author notes, I was able to pick them out pretty easily. I like this piece a lot, it really fits the lines well. They are meant to be there. It has really good word choice and flows smoothly. I like it a lot =) Thanks for entering!


  • Adelaide Blood
    May 4, 2008
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    nice poem

    well written as always lol ^^

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