Falling from the heavens1
The rain falls like tears2
Each tear a representation of3
A soul heaven won’t accept4
It’s a cry for help and suffering5
An apology for sin6
Although its disregarded7
The soul is on its way to hell8
It was never meant to live9
A peaceful afterlife10
And so it falls a lost soul11
Now linked to hell’s domain12
It never had a chance13
To make up for its wrongs14
And now must suffer a fate15
Of eternal damnation16
And so I ask you now17
Do you really love the rain?18
When all it truly is19
Is lost souls of the damned?
Author notes
This poem i think if philosophical and rather meaningful. It has some deep vibes to it I think, but I always love an opinion ^^
A contest entry
- Rain showers by trekkergirl.
200 points, ended August 28, 2008, 15 entries
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I love comments so comment it pretty please... any kinda comments, as long as your being honest!!!
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!! That was a really sad and meaningful poem!! I loved it!!!
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This is very creative and a very interesting write. I personally think of rain as a clensing act. I wrote a poem called reign that used the rain shower he was in to hide his emotions from his lover/friend. He could cry and his friend/lover couldn't see.
Read it it's a decent write I think. I have it penned to my page. It's one of the reasons I decided to have this contest... to see how others viewed rain.
Like I said good write. Enjoyed the read even if it was a bit on the sad side. I feel sorry now for those souls... there is no hope for redemption.
Thanks for joining the contest.
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This very depressing and sad. Since we are all connected by the Matrix as one, how can souls be lost? How can a Universe of unconditional love and forgiveness, dismiss certain souls from life after life? The definition of sin as translated from Aramaic, the language of Jesus, is miss the mark and each soul has a chance to retry. Hence, every soul living many lifetimes learning the lessons of karma and how to break the cycle of life and death.
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Well, my friend i loved this. I try to keep my comments honest and when I say I loved this, i mean it. It shows the void of emotion that I love to read and write. Keep writing.
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i really liked it. i thought u did a great job!
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