The Hitchhiker (chapter 7)

Tony and I drove a few1

miles without talking.2

The rain had stopped.3

It was around 3:30 am.4

I should have been home a5

long time ago.6

I thought about calling7

my babysitter.8

I stopped on the9

side of the highway.10

Tony: "Is everything alright?"11

Cynthia: "I have to call my babysitter."12

Tony: "You have kids?"13

Cynthia: "Yes, I have three beautiful children."14

Tony: "Aren't you afraid you15

are going to wake them?"16

Cynthia: "My house is fairly big,17

they wouldn't be able to18

hear the phone."19

I rummaged through my purse20

looking for the cell phone.21

Cynthia: "Damn it, it's not in here."22

Tony: "I have a phone23

you can use."24

Cynthia: "I don't mean to be a bother."25

Tony: "It's okay, I know you're worried."26

Cynthia: "Thanks."27

Tony: "No problem."28

Phone rings at the house.29

The babysitter is laying on30

the couch half asleep.31

She picks up the phone.32

Babysitter: "Hello?"33

Cynthia: "It's just me."34

Babysitter: "Where are you?"35

Cynthia: "I left the party a36

little late, I'm on my way home."37

Babysitter: "I was worried that38

something might have happened to you."39

Cynthia: "No, I'm okay."40

Babysitter: "Everything is okay here."41

Cynthia: "I'll be home shortly."42

Babysitter: "Okay."43

Cynthia: "Bye."44

Babysitter: "Bye."45

The babysitter hangs up46

the phone and dozes off to sleep.47

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  • Shinigami
    July 20, 2003
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    *fidgets as suspense builds up....* lol

  • silver sun
    July 13, 2003
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    Eek! I can't wait for the next. I love the simplicity of your style, and the contrast of more complicated ideas. Great writing, continue, continue.

    P.S.~ in the 4th chapter where you say "thanks," i think it needs to be corrected, you've written:

    Me: "Yes, I should be on my way now, thnaks."

    ...just a suggestion
    Edited on Jul 13, 9:30 p.m. because ''.


  • July 12, 2003
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    Wow! I can't wait to read more! You've really built up the suspision in this Tony character. I keep waiting to find out if he's good or bad. Lol. This is good. Keep writing! I'm anxious!

    ~*Samantha*~

  • NeNi
    July 9, 2003
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    This story isn't boring...but I just keep waiting to see what the end is gonna be like. I know whatever it is, it's gonna be good.
    ~*Whitney*~
    AKA
    ~*NeNi*~