Another Mission

I have to go on another mission soon.  Holidays are over.  I understand why we do it. Man, do they make sure we understand why we do it.  Photos of random families and smiling faces bombard my laptop all the time via government email.  It’s funny how they patronize us.  It must have slipped their minds that they recruited us, because we were the best and brightest.1

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I could probably run mental circles around the PhD whose job it is to make sure we stay in line.  I guess they have reason to think we’re losin’ it.  Rob has to lock himself behind a steel door at night.  I don’t blame him. He has a wife and kid. 3

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I wonder where we're going this time and how long we'll have to stay there?  It’s probably just a quick paint mission.  Satellite picked something suspicious up, or someone cracked and gave up a position. 5

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Hah! You’d never see that in the brochure.  It’s all about being a hero and serving your country, but they don’t tell you the stuff you have to do if you’re good enough.  Christ, it’s only been five years.  Five years.  Thirty seven times.  Christ!7

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Rob says it’s getting’ harder to walk by those punks lighten’ up, shortin’ up, shootin’ up where he lives.  He says we ought to take the demand away.  Sometimes, I think he’s right.9

 I wonder where we’re going this time?  It doesn’t matter.  Always the same.  They’re infesting some village, some hotel, some warehouse, and there will be men and women and children.  Here today, and gone tomorrow!  Hah! Gone tomorrow.  And, I’ll be done for a while.10

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  • Jaymielle
    January 12, 2005
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    Very interesting, you left me really curious as to what exactly is going on. And once again I was amazed at how much you said about this character without saying anything about him, just writing in his voice. With all the short, choppy, periodic sentences, you convey his disenchantment really well. In the third paragraph though, you wrote "were" instead of "we're" and "will" instead of "we'll." Great write!


  • American Cowgirl
    January 12, 2005
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    Wow! I love the thought process in this write. This is very deep and intruiging. I found myself having to read it, having to finish it and it was just wonderful. This is awesome and I am truly looking forward to going on and reading some more of your works. Thank you so much for sharing this, and I am very glad to have stumbled upon it.

  • mad hattie
    January 11, 2005
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    Intriguing read...I found myself wondering several different possibilities...makes me think about a new style of writing, and the kind that allows the imagination of the audience to have some reign...I could see a lot being added to this(if you'd so desire), it left me kind of searching for more. Great job, keep up the great work!


  • dragondancer
    January 10, 2005
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    Hm...

    Now that is some very very very very weird thoughts...I'm guessing this person is in some sort of line of work where he has to save people in some way or some such, but he has no choice over the matter now that he joined? At first I thought of missionaries, but it just doesn't seem like this would be a missionary like story as I kept reading...I'm wondering as the specifics, but it's all good. I liked it. The last line wasn't in the same font style as the rest, for some reason, but otherwise it was nice....Oh, and I seem to be missing you all day today again....