Cinnamon Buns

"Amethyst, wake up dammit!" I jolted awake, blinking and looking up at the person who yelled. Oh, it's just Aimery, for some reason he's been in a very bad mood lately. Always yelling, screaming, or grabbing at me, and other people too, I guess.1

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"Amethyst, c'mon, we gotta go, schools over." He grabs my arm, accidentally hitting one of my bruises. I involuntarily wince.3

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"Oh! Fuck! i'm sorry Amethyst!" His eyes suddenly got very big, at-least he still cares. "It's okay, Aimery." I say. Why am I always so...calm?5

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"Amethyst..." He starts, whilst dragging me into the halls, next to mine and his locker, they're next to each other. I can't help but notice how ugly the lockers are, they're a sort of puke-green, everyone hates the color.7

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"What?" I ask.9

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"You need to tell someone, call the police, do something! I don't care what the fuck you do, as long as you do it!" I can't tell anyone, why doesn't he know that?11

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"I can't, Aimery" He looks mad, now.13

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"Yes you fuckin' can, Amethyst!"15

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"No...no I can't the results would be worse than right now." He sighs, then grabs my hand, leading me out of the school.17

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"Look, Amethyst," He starts, but then see's my fathers car.19

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"Don't die while i'm gone, 'Kay?" he quickly whispers in my ear, then releases my hand. My father rolls down his window, and wave's me over.21

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I go over and get in the car, It's a red convertible.23

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"How was school today, Amy?" I hate it when he call's me Amy, but i'll never tell him that.25

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"It was a nice day, daddy." He nods, then starts the car.27

Author notes

I will, somehow, add pictures of the characters, I cannot draw, so i'll use some pictures on the Internet.
This is also, chapter one.

Does it need less swearing? Are the characters okay? Should I change it from boyxboy, and into a boyxgirl story? Are the names stupid? Can you even tell that the two main characters are male?

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  • Hellenic
    May 28, 2008
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    Thank you!
    I'm glad you like it!

  • luciferspixie
    May 14, 2008
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    (^^_)

    i like! pleaaaaaaaase go on with it!!!!

  • Hellenic
    May 2, 2008
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    There are boys at my school with unusual names.
    There are also two boys named Aimery and Amethyst, but this story isn't about them. I know that they(My characters) don't sound like boys, I dont really think their supposed too.
    Spoiler Warning?
    Amethyst is a boy, abused by his father, forced to act like a girl at home, he's kind of...mentally unstable.
    Aimery is not a typical type of boy, thats really all I have to say on that matter. In this story, the characters, are in anime style, because normal boys just dont fit. Amethyst has long blonde hair, and blue eyes. Really, their just perfect looking, I guess. Aimery has short black hair, and green eyes, yet another perfect figure. And plus, this is a gay story, so they will act slightly gay. neither of them are currently gay, yet. they're just in denial.
    Well, yeah, thats it, I guess.


  • hobo kiti
    April 29, 2008

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    It doesn't sound like male characters at ALL- not just their names, but also the fact that Aimery "sighs, then grabs my hand, leading me out of the school." Guys don't do that. The names are cool and all- but SOOO unrealistic. If they are a couple of kids who go to school, they should have the same kind of names as the kids at your school.

    Nice subtlety- detail os nice