Damaged Goods...

Little pinpricks of cold1
seeping through the cracks in my mind.2
I hammer desperately at the cramps within,3
as numbness sighs like Winter’s waking breath.4
It stretches it’s wings in a blanket of ice,5
consuming me, freezing me with it’s touch.6
And so I weep unseen…71

Voices rage in a maelstrom of thoughts,8
awakening the darkness once more.9
Must it always be this way?10
Always seeing, yet an empty shell in it’s shadow cast.11
Paralysis creeps through my cranium12
like a dormant assassin, unseen, unfelt,13
yet always so devastating.142

I’m so alone, bestowed as I am15
with these accursed demons.16
I’m losing my mind,17
Piece by piece, fragment by fragment, 18
It drains away into a void of self loathing and despair. 19
If I should mourn my loss of self,20
Then I weep for who I was… or who I should be…213

…Or who I could be…224

Help me……………235

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My motto is 'Embrace thine inner darkness, for thy creativity duth dwell'eth therein'.

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  • Forgotten Anomaly
    October 4, 2008

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    This gave me the creeps, because I could relate to it. Its wonderfully writen, I was intranced for the short span of time it took me to read this peice of art. Very well done.


  • Sgs
    September 26, 2008

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    Scary but I relate to this!
    "I’m losing my mind,
    Piece by piece, fragment by fragment,
    It drains away into a void of self loathing and despair."
    I have definitely felt this way at one time or another!


  • On.Cue
    August 29, 2008

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    This is nicely written.
    I think this piece would be better if you took away the excessive use of periods at the end.

    "Then I weep for who I was or who I should be,"
    Take out P22 and take away the periods at the end of P23.

    But it's your piece. Whatever floats your boat.

    Anyway, this is amazing, I think it's very well written.

    Good job


  • JuliaAlexandrovna
    May 8, 2008

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    It seems as though who read my and my feelings as of late. Very well done.

    My only suggestion, though, is a reduction of periods. I understand that it is meant as "trailing off," but there isn't a need for so much.

    Thank you for entering. Good luck in my contest. I'm sorry I missed your entry at first.

    x Julez